Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak daha etkili ve doğrudan olabilir. "Yes, I have liked writing a lot since I was a child." cümlesi yerine, doğrudan yazmayı sevdiğinizi belirtip, neden sevdiğinizi açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy expressing my thoughts and creativity through writing.

提案: Cevabınızda konuyu doğrudan yanıtlamışsınız ancak cümleler biraz uzun ve karmaşık. Daha kısa ve net cümleler kullanarak, neden kısa hikayeler yazdığınızı ve hukuk eğitiminizin yazma gereksinimlerini ayrı ayrı açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: I enjoy writing short stories because they make me feel happy. Besides that, my law studies require a lot of writing for exam preparations.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Daha akıcı ve doğru cümleler kurarak, yazdıklarınızın nasıl değiştiğini net bir şekilde ifade edebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, my writing has changed recently because I am preparing to become an advocate. Now, I often write legal memorandums, which is quite different from before.

提案: Cevabınız açık ve anlaşılır ancak biraz tekrar içeriyor. Daha kısa ve etkili cümlelerle neden el yazısını tercih ettiğinizi açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: I prefer handwriting because I find it more comfortable and I am not very skilled with computers or new technology.

提案: Cevabınızda fikirlerinizi güzel ifade etmişsiniz ancak cümle yapıları biraz karışık. Daha akıcı ve doğal cümlelerle düşüncelerinizi netleştirebilirsiniz.

例: I have never kept a diary, but I believe it would help me understand my feelings better and improve my writing skills. Maybe I will start one in the future.

提案: Cevabınız oldukça iyi ve detaylı. Ancak cümleler biraz uzun. Daha kısa cümlelerle aynı anlamı koruyarak daha doğal bir ifade kullanabilirsiniz.

例: I use photos and videos to record my life. They help me relive special moments and feel the emotions I had at that time.

× Yes, I have liked writing a lot since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have liked writing a lot since I was a child.

The sentence uses present perfect 'have liked' correctly to express an action continuing from the past to the present, so no correction needed.

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write?

The sentence is grammatically correct; no pronoun misuse detected.

× I like writing short stories which make me feel good and other than that I have to write because I study law and studying law requires a lot of writing and making a lot of preparations for your exams regarding writing.

✓ I like writing short stories that make me feel good. Besides that, I have to write because I study law, and studying law requires a lot of writing and preparation for exams related to writing.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Breaking it into shorter sentences and using appropriate conjunctions improves clarity and structure.

× Yes, the things I write has started to change.

✓ Yes, the things I write have started to change.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has' to agree in number.

× Right now I'm being an advocate requires a lot of memorandum writings.

✓ Right now, being an advocate requires a lot of memorandum writing.

The phrase 'I'm being an advocate' is incorrect here; 'being an advocate' is the correct gerund phrase as the subject. Also, 'memorandum writings' should be 'memorandum writing' as 'writing' is uncountable in this context.

× So lately I have been dealing with a lot of memorandum writings.

✓ So lately, I have been dealing with a lot of memorandum writing.

'Writing' in this context is uncountable, so 'writings' is incorrect. Use 'writing' without 's' to indicate the activity or material.

× I prefer doing things the old way, so I prefer handwriting.

✓ I prefer doing things the old way; therefore, I prefer handwriting.

Using 'so' is acceptable but 'therefore' or a semicolon can improve the formal connection between clauses.

× I still prefer handwriting compared to typing, and actually I'm not very good at using computers and I'm not very good at understanding the new technology, so I might end up getting lost while I'm typing on a computer.

✓ I still prefer handwriting compared to typing, and actually, I'm not very good at using computers or understanding new technology, so I might end up getting lost while typing on a computer.

The sentence is mostly correct; minor punctuation added for clarity and 'or' used instead of repeating 'and' for better flow.

× I have never kept a diary in my life, but I think that it would have been great for understanding my opinions and feelings better and it would also improve my writing skills.

✓ I have never kept a diary in my life, but I think that it would be great for understanding my opinions and feelings better and it would also improve my writing skills.

The phrase 'would have been' implies a past hypothetical situation, but the context suggests a present or future possibility, so 'would be' is more appropriate.

× But I've never got to keep Diaries.

✓ But I've never gotten to keep diaries.

The correct past participle of 'get' in American English is 'gotten' when used in perfect tenses. Also, 'diaries' should not be capitalized.

× Maybe I will in the future.

✓ Maybe I will in the future.

The sentence is correct; no changes needed.

× I think that taking pictures and recording videos are a very good way of recording your life because whenever you miss that moment that you have lived, you can open a picture or the video and relive that moment.

✓ I think that taking pictures and recording videos are very good ways of recording your life because whenever you miss a moment you have lived, you can open a picture or a video and relive that moment.

'A very good way' should be plural 'very good ways' because two activities are mentioned. Also, 'a picture or a video' is more appropriate than 'the video' for general reference.

× And it also makes you feel very much in the moment and helps you relieve your emotions at that moment.

✓ It also makes you feel very much in the moment and helps you relieve your emotions at that moment.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; removing it improves formality. The rest is correct.