Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子并使用正确的时态和表达方式。

例: Yes, I have been writing a lot recently because I am preparing for exams that include a writing section, so I practice writing every day.

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达含糊，建议直接回答问题并用具体细节支持观点，避免重复。

例: I enjoy writing about education because I have personal experience in this field, which makes it easier for me to express my ideas clearly.

提案: 表达不准确且有语法错误，建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，清晰表达观点。

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change in the future because my opinions and the facts I know now may be different later on.

提案: 回答较为自然，但有语法错误和表达不够简洁，建议简化句子并注意语法。

例: I prefer typing on my phone because it is convenient; I can write anywhere and anytime, and I can easily look up information when needed.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅，建议使用正确时态和更自然的表达方式。

例: I rarely keep a diary because I don't have the habit. Maybe I write in it once or twice a year when I have strong emotions that I want to remember.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，建议完整表达观点，避免重复用词，并使用连贯的句子。

例: I usually record my life by taking photos and short videos because it is very convenient; I just need to use my phone to capture moments anytime.

× You write a lot. I write a lot recently because now I'm preparing for this else tests and the tests contain the writing part, so I need to practice to write a lot every day.

✓ I write a lot recently because now I'm preparing for these other tests and the tests contain the writing part, so I need to practice writing a lot every day.

句子中“this else tests”应为“these other tests”，因为“tests”是复数，指示代词应使用复数形式“these”，且“else”用法不当，应改为“other”。此外，“practice to write”应改为“practice writing”，动词后接动名词形式。

× As what I mentioned now, I write a lot for the alt writing task and in most of these topics I like writing about the education most because I have the exact experience in it.

✓ As I mentioned just now, I write a lot for the ALT writing task and among most of these topics, I like writing about education the most because I have exact experience in it.

“As what I mentioned now”表达不自然，应改为“As I mentioned just now”。“the alt writing task”中的“alt”应大写为“ALT”，且“the education”中“education”前不需要冠词“the”。

× I think it's obviously that what I wrote will change in the future because what I write is the opinion of my in the at present and the facts also will be virus in the future. So I think it would be changed.

✓ I think it's obvious that what I write will change in the future because what I write is my opinion at present and the facts may also change in the future. So I think it will change.

“it's obviously”应为“it's obvious”，副词改为形容词。“the opinion of my in the at present”结构错误，应为“my opinion at present”。“will be virus”应为“may also change”，表达事实可能变化。最后“would be changed”改为“will change”，更符合语境。

× I prefer to typing on my phone because it's more convenient and I can type in everywhere and every time just with my phone on my hand. And I can also search for some information with my phone that's very easy to touch.

✓ I prefer typing on my phone because it's more convenient and I can type anywhere and anytime just with my phone in my hand. And I can also search for some information with my phone; that's very easy to do.

“prefer to typing”应为“prefer typing”，动词后接动名词。介词“on my phone”正确，但“type in everywhere”应为“type anywhere”，“in”多余。短语“with my phone on my hand”应为“with my phone in my hand”。“easy to touch”表达不当，应为“easy to do”。

× I seldom keep Diaries because I didn't. I don't have this habit. So maybe I would write the Diaries once or twice a year when I have strong emotion which I think need to be recalled that time.

✓ I seldom keep diaries because I don't have this habit. So maybe I would write in my diary once or twice a year when I have strong emotions that I think need to be recalled at that time.

“Diaries”不需要大写，且“keep diaries”通常指写日记，改为小写。句中“I didn't”不完整，删去。后半句“strong emotion”应为复数“strong emotions”，“which I think need to be recalled that time”结构不清，应改为“that I think need to be recalled at that time”。

× I think taking photos and short videos are very convenient to record our life in the daily life because it's very convenient. You just need to click the item on your phone and moreover, this may.

✓ I think taking photos and short videos is very convenient to record our daily life because it's very easy. You just need to click the icon on your phone; moreover, this may help.

“taking photos and short videos are”主语为复合主语，但作为整体看作单一活动，谓语用单数“is”。“the item”应为“the icon”更合适。句末“this may”不完整，应补充谓语“help”。