Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复且表达不够自然，建议避免重复句子，使用更自然流畅的表达，并且注意语法正确。

例: Yes, I write quite a lot because I enjoy keeping journals. Writing helps me express my daily feelings and remember important events, which makes me feel good.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用完整句子，明确表达写作内容和原因，避免语法错误。

例: I like to write about important events in my daily life so I can remember them clearly. I also write about my special feelings, such as happiness and sadness.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并补充完整的理由。

例: Yes, I think what I write changes because different things happen every day. Therefore, my writing reflects these daily changes and special moments.

提案: 回答中有重复且表达不够流畅，建议简洁表达偏好并说明原因，避免重复。

例: I prefer handwriting because it allows me to express my emotions better when I write with a pen or pencil.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议使用完整句子，清晰说明写日记的频率和原因。

例: I keep diaries occasionally because I only write about significant events or special feelings. Writing diaries takes a lot of time, so I do it when necessary.

提案: 回答较好，但句子结构可以更自然流畅，建议调整语序并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I also take photos with my mobile phone to record my life because they are easy to take and can capture moments I want to remember forever.

× Yes, I ride quite a bit because yes, I ride quite a bit because I love writing in my journals.

✓ Yes, I write quite a bit because I love writing in my journals.

这里的动词应该是"write"，而不是"ride"。"ride"表示骑乘，与写作无关。应使用动词原形"write"来表达写作的动作。

× I can write down the different feelings every day and some write down some significant things to remember.

✓ I can write down different feelings every day and also write down some significant things to remember.

句中"some write down some significant things"结构不正确，且"some"用法混乱。应去掉多余的"some"，使句子通顺。

× I like write some important things in my daily life and I can remember them clearly and I also write some special feelings that they like, enjoyment and sadness that they so I read a lot.

✓ I like to write some important things in my daily life so I can remember them clearly. I also write about special feelings like enjoyment and sadness, so I read a lot.

句中缺少不定式"to"，"that they like"和"that they so I read a lot"结构混乱，代词使用不当，导致句意不清。需要调整句子结构和代词使用。

× Well, I think the things I write will change because the things happen every day are changed.

✓ Well, I think the things I write will change because the things that happen every day change.

"the things happen"缺少关系代词"that"，"are changed"被动语态不合适，应使用主动语态"change"。

× So the things I write down are changed to and there are different things happened every day and different special things happen.

✓ So the things I write down also change, and different things happen every day, including special events.

"are changed to"结构错误，"things happened"时态和结构不对，应使用主动现在时"happen"。

× And I write because.

✓ And I write because I want to express myself.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，导致句意不明。需要补充完整句子。

× Well, I prefer handwriting in my writing because handwriting can better express my emotions while I was writing with a pen or pencil and it can it can help me.

✓ Well, I prefer handwriting because it can better express my emotions while I am writing with a pen or pencil, and it can help me.

"while I was writing"时态不一致，应使用现在进行时"while I am writing"，以符合表达习惯。

× Well, I write down Diaries occasionally because I only write something significant things or very special feelings that day because write some write write some Diaries are uh, take a lot of time, so I just do it occasionally when I need.

✓ Well, I write down diaries occasionally because I only write about significant things or very special feelings that day. Writing diaries takes a lot of time, so I just do it occasionally when I need to.

"Diaries"不应大写，"something significant things"数量词使用错误，句子结构混乱，需要拆分和调整。

× I also take some photos to record my life because photos are easy to take, use my mobile phone and it can freeze the moment that I want to remember forever.

✓ I also take some photos to record my life because photos are easy to take using my mobile phone, and they can freeze the moments that I want to remember forever.

"use my mobile phone"应改为"using my mobile phone"，以正确表达方式；"it can freeze the moment"主语应为复数"they"，与前文"photos"一致。