Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I write almost every day because I work in marketing. I usually take notes on my netbook to remember important information and keep myself organized.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇且表达不够流畅。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并避免模糊表达。

例: I like to write about work-related topics, such as meeting schedules, project updates, and important weather information, because it helps me stay organized and manage my time effectively.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, the things I write often change because I make plans for the future. For example, if the weather is better than expected or something urgent happens, I have to adjust my plans quickly.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和不完整句子，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，避免重复，并清楚表达观点。

例: I definitely prefer typing because I always carry my phone. I can quickly write important notes in my phone reminders anytime and anywhere, which is very convenient.

提案: 语法错误影响表达效果，如时态错误。建议注意动词形式，简化句子结构，使表达更自然。

例: To be honest, I have never kept a diary because I don't have the habit of writing down my thoughts. I usually prefer to talk to my friends on the phone, which I find more effective.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，表达不够流畅。建议注意动词形式和词汇搭配，使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Actually, I prefer taking photos and videos to record my life because they capture special moments clearly. I save them on my phone or computer and watch them whenever I want to recall these memories.

× I work in a marketing department so I have a lot of the important information and meetings scheduled, so I usually write the note in my netbook to help me remember the details and stay organized.

✓ I work in a marketing department so I have a lot of important information and meetings scheduled, so I usually write notes in my netbook to help me remember the details and stay organized.

“a lot of the important information”中的“the”不必要且不正确，应去掉；“the note”应为复数形式“notes”，因为通常写多条笔记。

× Also also writing can.

✓ Also, I can write.

句子结构不完整且重复“also”，应简化为完整句子“Also, I can write.”。

× I prefer to write something about work related topics such as the meeting scheduled, the project updates and something something important information about the weather.

✓ I prefer to write about work-related topics such as meeting schedules, project updates, and important information about the weather.

“work related topics”应加连字符为“work-related topics”；“the meeting scheduled”应为复数“meeting schedules”；“something something”重复，应去掉。

× Oh yes, most of the things I write down tends to change because I usually make plans for the future of, for example, if the weather is better than I expected or if something urgent comes up, I need to change my plans immediately.

✓ Oh yes, most of the things I write down tend to change because I usually make plans for the future. For example, if the weather is better than I expected or if something urgent comes up, I need to change my plans immediately.

“things I write down tends”中主语是复数“things”，谓语应为“tend”；句子过长且结构混乱，应拆分为两句。

× So the the things I write down is flexible.

✓ So the things I write down are flexible.

主语“things”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。

× Definitely typing because I I always bring my phone with me so I can write down something important in my phone reminders anywhere and anytime is very comfortable and also I can check my phone reminders so that I can check the.

✓ Definitely typing because I always bring my phone with me, so I can write down something important in my phone reminders anywhere and anytime. It is very convenient, and I can also check my phone reminders easily.

句子过长且结构混乱，重复“I”，缺少主语和谓语，应拆分并补充完整句子。

× To be honest, I have never keep a diary before because I don't have the habit of writing down my thoughts whenever I want to share something important.

✓ To be honest, I have never kept a diary before because I don't have the habit of writing down my thoughts whenever I want to share something important.

“have never keep”中“keep”应为过去分词“kept”，因为现在完成时需要过去分词。

× I found it more effectively than writing.

✓ I found it more effective than writing.

“effectively”是副词，应改为形容词“effective”，因为修饰“it”。

× Actually I prefer to take photos and videos to record my life because I find it more easily to capture the special moment clearly.

✓ Actually, I prefer to take photos and videos to record my life because I find it easier to capture special moments clearly.

“more easily”应改为“easier”，因为“find it + 形容词”结构中用形容词；“the special moment”应为复数“special moments”，且不需要定冠词。

× I save them on my phone or computer and I can watching them whenever I want to release this memories for example.

✓ I save them on my phone or computer and I can watch them whenever I want to recall these memories, for example.

“can watching”应为“can watch”，情态动词后接动词原形；“release this memories”用词不当，应为“recall these memories”，且“memories”为复数，需用“these”。