Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了写作的频率和原因，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和拼写错误（如“Acers”应为“articles”或“essays”），句子结构不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇，简洁表达写作习惯，并注意语法。

例: Yes, I write quite often. I usually write articles or short stories once a week because I enjoy creating new endings for famous characters and also like to record my daily life.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，且表达不够清晰。建议避免重复，使用正确的词汇（如“Harry”而非“hurry”），并简洁说明喜欢写作的内容和原因。

例: I enjoy writing stories about famous characters, such as Harry Potter, because I like to imagine alternative plots and endings for them.

提案: 回答表达了观点和原因，但句子较长且重复“always change”。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，避免重复，并更具体说明如何修改故事。

例: Yes, I often change the endings of my stories because some readers tell me they prefer happier conclusions, so I try to make my stories more uplifting.

提案: 回答表达了偏好，但句子不完整且有语法错误（如“prefer to writing”应为“prefer writing”）。建议完善句子结构，使用连词连接观点，并清晰表达原因。

例: It depends on the situation. I prefer typing stories on my phone or computer because it's faster, but I like handwriting in my diary since it feels more personal and relaxing.

× I like writing and I always write Acers or a story once a week because I want to correct something about some famous characters and record my lives.

✓ I like writing and I always write essays or a story once a week because I want to correct something about some famous characters and record my life.

这里“Acers”应为“essays”，且“lives”应为“life”，因为“record my life”指的是记录自己的生活，life是不可数名词，不能用复数形式。

× I like I like writing some stories about some famous character, like the hurry in Harry Potter, because I want to change the stories about about them.

✓ I like writing some stories about some famous characters, like Harry in Harry Potter, because I want to change the stories about them.

“character”应为复数形式“characters”，因为指多个著名人物；“the hurry”应为“Harry”，是人名拼写错误。

× I like I like writing some stories about some famous character, like the hurry in Harry Potter, because I want to change the stories about about them.

✓ I like writing some stories about some famous characters, like Harry in Harry Potter, because I want to change the stories about them.

“about about them”重复，应去掉一个“about”。

× And I always change the endings in my stories because some readers text me that they don't want to feel depressed after reading my stories, so I always change my stories.

✓ And I always change the endings of my stories because some readers text me that they don't want to feel depressed after reading my stories, so I always change my stories.

“endings in my stories”应改为“endings of my stories”，表示“故事的结局”，介词用法错误。

× Well, it really depends on different situations. I like typing on my phone or computers when I write some stories, but when I write some Diaries I prefer to writing on the papers because it can let me.

✓ Well, it really depends on different situations. I like typing on my phone or computer when I write some stories, but when I write some diaries I prefer writing on paper because it helps me.

“computers”应为单数“computer”，表示设备；“Diaries”不需要大写；“prefer to writing”应为“prefer writing”，动词搭配错误；“on the papers”应为“on paper”，固定搭配；“it can let me”表达不完整，改为“it helps me”更自然。