Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，且内容重复。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用简洁的语言表达观点。

例: No, I don't write a lot because during my school years, I had to write many essays and academic articles, which I found difficult and tiring. Therefore, I prefer not to write much now.

提案: 回答较为自然，但句子连接不够流畅，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，同时丰富细节。

例: If I have to write, I prefer keeping a diary because it allows me to write freely without worrying about rules. It's a personal record for myself to look back on in the future.

提案: 回答内容有一定逻辑，但表达不够连贯，建议使用更多连接词，并注意时态和语法的准确性。

例: Yes, my writing has changed over time. As a child, I enjoyed writing simple stories and even tried to write a novel. However, now that I am at university, I focus more on writing essays that require academic sources.

提案: 表达有些混乱，建议理清思路，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because it helps my thoughts flow more freely. When I type on a computer, I feel disconnected from my writing, and my ideas become less energetic and more scattered.

× Well, actually reading maybe not what I want to do because I write too much in my school time during my life experience and I hate to do some like essays or academic articles to raise them.

✓ Well, actually reading may not be what I want to do because I wrote too much during my school time and life experience, and I hate doing things like essays or academic articles to improve them.

这里“reading maybe not what I want to do”中，动词“reading”应与后面的结构搭配，使用动名词形式“reading may not be”更合适；“hate to do some like essays”中，“hate”后面应接动名词形式，改为“hate doing things like essays”更自然。

× Well, if I must to write something, I prefer to write some Diaries, because that is not so strictly needed to focus too much.

✓ Well, if I must write something, I prefer to write some diaries, because that does not require strict focus.

“must”后面不加“to”，应直接接动词原形“write”；“Diaries”应小写，且“that is not so strictly needed to focus too much”表达不自然，改为“does not require strict focus”更准确。

× Well, yes, maybe as my childhood I just to write some easy stories by myself.

✓ Well, yes, maybe in my childhood I just wrote some easy stories by myself.

“as my childhood”应改为“in my childhood”表示时间；“just to write”应使用过去时“just wrote”，因为描述过去的动作。

× Absolutely handwriting because handwriting really helps my logical to be more freely and what I want to write.

✓ Absolutely handwriting, because handwriting really helps my logic to be freer and helps me express what I want to write.

“my logical”应为“my logic”，且“to be more freely”中“freely”应为形容词“freer”修饰“logic”；句子结构不完整，补充“helps me express”使句子完整。

× I just write down but use computers typing I feel some distance into the article and my thinking will not be energetic and so jumping when using typing.

✓ I just write down, but when using computer typing, I feel some distance from the article, and my thinking is not energetic and jumps around.

“use computers typing”应改为“when using computer typing”；“distance into the article”应为“distance from the article”；“my thinking will not be energetic and so jumping”表达不自然，改为“my thinking is not energetic and jumps around”更通顺。