Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and incorrect word usage (e.g., 'ride' instead of 'write'). Also, keep your answer concise and directly relevant to the question. Use linking words to improve coherence and correct grammar for clarity.

例: No, I don't write a lot, especially in the past six months since I've been working as a data scientist. Most of my writing involves coding rather than essays or articles.

提案: Focus on clear and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'congrats' is incorrect here). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid filler phrases. Also, check subject-verb agreement and sentence structure for clarity.

例: I like to write novels because they allow me to express my creativity. When I'm bored, I often have many ideas that I can't use otherwise, so writing novels helps me put those ideas to good use.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time, especially when it comes to technology-related content. Since technology evolves rapidly, like AI revolutionising various industries, my writing reflects these changes.

提案: Use correct prepositions and verb forms (e.g., 'practice typing' instead of 'practice on typing'). Keep sentences concise and use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

例: I prefer handwriting because I'm quite slow at typing. I guess I need more practice typing on keyboards to improve my speed.

× No, I don't ride a lot, especially when during the past six months I have been working in the industry as data scientist.

✓ No, I don't write a lot, especially during the past six months I have been working in the industry as a data scientist.

The original sentence contains a typo 'ride' instead of 'write', which is a verb error. Also, 'when during' is redundant; 'during' alone is sufficient. Additionally, 'data scientist' needs an article 'a' before it. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So most of the time I will be writing code instead of, uh, extra text like essay or, you know, some argumentative essay or articles.

✓ So most of the time I will be writing code instead of extra text like essays or, you know, some argumentative essays or articles.

The phrase 'extra text like essay' is incorrect because 'essay' should be plural 'essays' to match 'articles'. Also, 'extra text' is better without the comma before it. This correction ensures proper pluralization and smoother sentence flow.

× I write. I like to write novels as it allows me to Congrats my creativity and use it for something useful.

✓ I write. I like to write novels as it allows me to express my creativity and use it for something useful.

The word 'Congrats' is incorrect here; the intended verb is likely 'express'. Using the correct verb clarifies the meaning and maintains grammatical correctness.

× As most of the time when I was bored I would have so much ideas that you know I couldn't put it to use.

✓ As most of the time when I was bored I would have so many ideas that, you know, I couldn't put them to use.

'So much ideas' is incorrect because 'ideas' is countable and requires 'many' instead of 'much'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to correctly refer to the plural 'ideas'. These changes correct quantifier and pronoun usage.

× So I feels like writing novel actually allows me to put it to some good use.

✓ So I feel like writing novels actually allows me to put it to some good use.

'I feels' is incorrect; the verb should be 'feel' to agree with the first person singular subject 'I'. Also, 'writing novel' should be 'writing novels' to be plural and natural. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and noun number.

× Yes, certainly. Especially when I was writing some quotes or some text related to technology.

✓ Yes, certainly. Especially when I write some quotes or some text related to technology.

The question is about things that might change, implying present or future relevance. Using past tense 'was writing' is less appropriate than present tense 'write' to indicate ongoing or habitual action.

× I believe that technology changed just very rapidly.

✓ I believe that technology changes very rapidly.

The verb 'changed' is past tense, but the sentence expresses a general truth, so present tense 'changes' is appropriate. Also, 'just very rapidly' is awkward; 'very rapidly' suffices.

× As you know, AI has been rapidly revolu revolutionising the whole know market, industry and all those.

✓ As you know, AI has been rapidly revolutionising the whole known market, industry and all those.

The phrase 'revolu revolutionising' is a typo and should be 'revolutionising'. Also, 'know market' should be 'known market'. These corrections fix spelling errors and improve clarity.

× I would say that I prefer handwriting because I'm very slow at typing.

✓ I would say that I prefer handwriting because I'm very slow at typing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I guess I just needed to have more practice on typing on keyboards and the further improving the speed of type.

✓ I guess I just need to have more practice typing on keyboards and further improve my typing speed.

'Needed' should be 'need' to match present context. 'Practice on typing' is incorrect; 'practice typing' is correct. 'The further improving' is awkward; 'further improve' is better. 'Speed of type' should be 'typing speed'. These corrections improve verb tense, preposition use, and phrase clarity.