Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 'pen and papers' 대신 'pen and paper'를 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 조금 더 간결하게 만들고, 구체적인 예시를 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, I write a lot, especially when preparing for exams and writing reports. I usually use pen and paper because it helps me focus better.

提案: 문법 오류가 있고, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 'writing' 대신 'write'를 사용하고, 문장을 명확하게 구성해야 합니다. 또한, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: It depends on the situation, but I usually write down my daily tasks and put the notes on my desk to help me remember them better.

提案: 문장이 길고 복잡하며 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 나누어 표현하고, 미래에 대한 예측을 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I think what I write will change. Currently, I write reports and exam notes, but when I get a job, I will write work-related documents.

提案: 'long contacts'는 'long texts'로 수정해야 하며, 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 또한, 'rememberable'은 올바른 단어가 아니므로 'help me remember better'로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다.

例: It depends on the situation. If I have to write long texts, I usually type, but for other cases, I write on paper because it helps me remember better.

× So I usually writing things that I have to do in today and it put it on my desk so it can make me more remember things.

✓ So I usually write things that I have to do today and put them on my desk so it can help me remember things better.

'Usually writing' is incorrect because after 'usually' we use the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'in today' should be 'today' without 'in'. 'It put it' is incorrect; it should be 'put them' to refer to the things. 'Make me more remember things' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'help me remember things better'. 'Usually' is an adverb of frequency and should be followed by the base verb form. The '-ing' form is used for continuous tenses or as gerunds, which is not the case here.

× Yes I think the things I write will change so it now I am still so I have to write my reports or exams but if I get a job so I will write the things related to my jobs or.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write will change. Right now, I still have to write my reports or exams, but if I get a job, I will write things related to my job.

The original sentence has several issues including incorrect verb forms and sentence structure. 'So it now I am still so I have to write' is confusing and incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper tense and structure. Also, 'jobs' should be singular 'job' to match the context. The verb forms and sentence structure need to be clear and logical to convey the intended meaning.

× I usually use pen and papers.

✓ I usually use pen and paper.

The phrase 'pen and papers' is incorrect because 'paper' is an uncountable noun in this context and should not be pluralized. Also, no preposition is needed here. Using 'paper' as an uncountable noun is standard when referring to the material used for writing.

× so it can make me more remember things.

✓ so it can help me remember things better.

The phrase 'make me more remember things' is incorrect. The verb 'make' is not used with 'remember' in this way. Instead, 'help me remember things better' is the correct expression. 'Remember' is a verb that does not take 'more' directly; instead, 'better' is used as an adverb to modify the verb.

× so it can make me more rememberable.

✓ so it can help me remember better.

'Rememberable' is not a correct word in English. The correct adverb to use here is 'better' to describe the improvement in memory. Use 'remember better' instead of 'more rememberable' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× If I have to long contacts to write up so I usually use typing and in other cases I usually write down on paper so it can make me more rememberable.

✓ If I have long content to write, I usually use typing, and in other cases, I usually write down on paper so it can help me remember better.

'Long contacts' is incorrect; the correct word is 'long content'. Also, 'use typing' should be 'use typing' or 'type'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity. 'Make me more rememberable' is corrected as explained before. Correct word choice and sentence structure are important for clear communication.