Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和重复用词，影响了表达的自然性和流畅性。建议注意动词时态和单复数形式的正确使用，避免重复词汇，并尝试用更简洁的句子表达观点。

例: No, I don't write a lot because I don't enjoy writing essays or doing research projects. Writing requires a wide range of knowledge, which I find challenging. However, I do write occasionally when it is necessary for my studies.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，句子结构混乱，影响了表达的清晰度。建议加强词汇的准确性和句子结构的完整性，避免拼写错误，并用连贯的句子表达想法。

例: I like writing about my daily life because I believe that good moments should be recorded and shared with close friends or family.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，逻辑混乱，语法错误较多。建议理清思路，使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

例: No, I don't think what I write can change because I write about past events. Even if the event happens again, the past cannot be changed.

提案: 回答较为自然，但存在语法错误和表达不够简洁的问题。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用更流畅的句子连接。

例: I prefer typing because I can use my phone or computer. I usually carry my phone with me, so I can quickly record events when they happen.

× No, I don't write a lot because I am not enjoying writing essays or researching projects.

✓ No, I don't write a lot because I do not enjoy writing essays or researching projects.

动词 enjoy 后面应接动名词形式，但这里用的是进行时态（am not enjoying），不符合习惯用法。应使用一般现在时的动词形式以表达习惯性动作。

× I think writing require a wide range of knowledgeable which I find challenging.

✓ I think writing requires a wide range of knowledge which I find challenging.

主语 writing 是单数，谓语动词 require 应该用第三人称单数形式 requires。knowledge 是不可数名词，不用加 -able。

× However, I do write occasionally occasionally when it is necessary for my studies.

✓ However, I do write occasionally when it is necessary for my studies.

句中重复使用了 occasionally，应删除重复词。

× I like writing a certification or fraction based on my daily life because I think some good moment in my daddy life should be recorded and shared to someone I the relationship is very close.

✓ I like writing a diary or reflection based on my daily life because I think some good moments in my daily life should be recorded and shared with someone I have a close relationship with.

certification 和 fraction 用错，应该是 diary 或 reflection。moment 应用复数 moments。daddy life 拼写错误，应为 daily life。动词 share 后接介词 with 而非 to。关系代词和句子结构需调整。

× No, I don't think something I write can change, because what I write is something happened in past time, but in last time this event happened again.

✓ No, I don't think something I write can change, because what I write is something that happened in the past, but this event happened again last time.

过去发生的事情应使用过去时 happened。短语 in past time 不自然，应改为 in the past。last time 应放在句尾。

× I can change my truth, what I make I can change the previous time.

✓ I cannot change the truth; what I have done cannot change the past.

句子结构混乱，表达不清。应使用否定形式表达“我不能改变事实”，并用完成时态表达过去的行为。

× I prefer typing actually, because I can type in my phone or my computer or any electric equipment.

✓ I prefer typing actually, because I can type on my phone or my computer or any electronic device.

动词 type 后应接介词 on 而非 in。electric equipment 用词不当，应为 electronic device。

× I usually take my phone with me so I can record the events when it's happened and I can record it is quickly.

✓ I usually take my phone with me so I can record events when they happen and I can record them quickly.

when it's happened 时态错误，应为 when they happen（一般现在时）。record it is quickly 结构错误，应为 record them quickly。