Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some irrelevant information. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, focus on whether you write a lot and why.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially for my studies and work projects. Writing helps me remember important information and organise my thoughts effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using clearer sentence structure and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid filler words like 'umm' and be more specific about what you write and why.

例: I like to write down important appointments and reminders on my mobile phone's note app because it is very convenient and helps me remember everything easily.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, if the information I write changes, I update my notes on my phone accordingly. However, I usually don't change them unless necessary.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster, especially in this modern era where technology makes writing easier.

× lighting is the most necessary thing and mostly people write the important notes or word on them while formed because it is very convenient for us

✓ Lighting is the most necessary thing and mostly people write important notes or words on them while formed because it is very convenient for us

The word 'word' should be plural 'words' to agree with 'notes' and the context of multiple items being written. This is a singular and plural issue where countable nouns need to be correctly pluralized when referring to more than one.

× mostly people write the important notes or word on them while formed

✓ mostly people write important notes or words on them while formed

The pronoun 'them' is unclear and incorrectly used here. It should refer to a specific noun previously mentioned. Since 'lighting' is singular and abstract, 'them' is inappropriate. The sentence needs clarification or rephrasing to specify what 'them' refers to.

× I'm also a person who love to write for my study work or my project work Oregon something related to my work

✓ I'm also a person who loves to write for my study work or my project work or something related to my work

The pronoun 'who' refers to 'person' which is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' not 'love'. Also, 'Oregon' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'or' and should be corrected. This is a pronoun and verb agreement issue.

× I'm also a person who love to write for my study work or my project work Oregon something related to my work

✓ I'm also a person who loves to write for my study work or my project work or something related to my work

The verb 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'who' referring to 'person'. This is a third person singular issue.

× I like to write my most important things for my important umm appointment which I basically write on my mobile phone note app

✓ I like to write my most important things for my important appointments which I basically write on my mobile phone note app

The word 'appointment' should be plural 'appointments' because 'things' is plural and the context suggests multiple appointments. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and singular/plural mismatch.

× If the things would change, then I'll definitely change all the notepad which I write all the things on my mobile phone and most of it

✓ If the things change, then I'll definitely change all the notepads on which I write all the things on my mobile phone and most of them

'Notepad' should be plural 'notepads' to match 'all'. Also, 'most of it' should be 'most of them' to refer to plural 'notepads'. The phrase 'which I write all the things on my mobile phone' is awkward and corrected to 'on which I write all the things on my mobile phone'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and singular/plural issue.

× If the things would change, then I'll definitely change all the notepad

✓ If the things change, then I'll definitely change all the notepads

In conditional sentences, 'would' is not used in the 'if' clause. The correct form is simple present 'change' in the 'if' clause. This is a modal verb usage error.

× Most of the time I did not change it because because I found it is not necessary or if

✓ Most of the time I do not change it because I find it is not necessary

The sentence has repetition 'because because' and an incomplete ending 'or if'. Also, tense inconsistency with 'did not change' and 'found'. Corrected to present tense for consistency and clarity. This is a sentence structure error.

× Will I prefer for typing because it is the most convenient?

✓ I prefer typing because it is the most convenient

'Will I prefer' is incorrect here; preference is a present state, so simple present 'I prefer' is appropriate. Also, 'prefer for typing' is incorrect; 'prefer typing' is correct. This is a modal verb usage error.

× Will I prefer for typing because it is the most convenient? In this model era, it is very easy for us to write all the things easily

✓ I prefer typing because it is the most convenient. In this modern era, it is very easy for us to write all things easily

'For typing' should be 'typing' without 'for'. 'Model era' is a mishearing of 'modern era'. Also, 'all the things' can be simplified to 'all things'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and vocabulary error.