Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复，句子结构不够清晰。建议直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明原因，避免冗余。

例: No, I don't write a lot these days because I am focusing on preparing for my IELTS test. Therefore, I spend most of my time practicing English rather than writing.

提案: 回答中表达不够清楚，语法和词汇使用有误。建议用更准确的表达说明你喜欢写什么和原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I like to write a diary to record simple events in my daily life because it helps me remember important moments. Also, I enjoy noting down good sentences I find in books to improve my vocabulary.

提案: 回答有一定逻辑，但表达不够流畅，句子结构需要改进。建议使用更自然的表达和连接词，使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, definitely. I believe that my thoughts and feelings will change over time. For example, I might write about my opinion of someone today, but in the future, my feelings could be different.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议用更准确的词汇和句型表达你的偏好，并简洁说明原因。

例: I definitely prefer typing because I am skilled at using the keyboard and I use my computer every day, which makes typing more convenient for me.

× So those of my time just practice my English and improve my English level.

✓ So most of my time I just practiced my English and improved my English level.

The sentence describes past actions, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Practice' and 'improve' should be changed to 'practiced' and 'improved' to match the past tense context.

× So I didn't write anything including diary.

✓ So I didn't write anything, including a diary.

The sentence is in past tense, so 'didn't write' is correct. However, 'diary' needs an article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. Adding a comma before 'including' improves clarity.

× Well, maybe I just want to record some simple thing in my daily life.

✓ Well, maybe I just want to record some simple things in my daily life.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' because 'some' is used to indicate more than one item.

× So I like to write diary to helpful memory someday and I also like to write some good sentence from some.

✓ So I like to write a diary to help my memory someday and I also like to write some good sentences from somewhere.

'Helpful' is an adjective but here a verb 'help' is needed after 'to'. 'Diary' needs an article 'a'. 'Sentence' should be plural 'sentences' to match 'some'. 'From some' is incomplete; 'from somewhere' is more appropriate.

× Yes, definitely. I think everything will be changed someday.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think everything will change someday.

'Will be changed' is passive voice and unnecessary here. The active form 'will change' is correct for future tense in this context.

× Maybe today I write about my feeling about one person, but someday I will change my opinion for her.

✓ Maybe today I write about my feelings about one person, but someday I will change my opinion of her.

'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context. 'Opinion for her' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'opinion of her'.

× So the thing that I already written down.

✓ So the thing that I have already written down.

The present perfect tense 'have written' is needed here to indicate an action completed in the past with relevance to the present.

× Typing definitely because I have talented in typing anything and I am very familiar with the computer keyboard.

✓ Typing definitely because I am talented in typing anything and I am very familiar with the computer keyboard.

'Have talented' is incorrect; 'am talented' is the correct expression to describe ability or skill.

× So I use my computer everyday and that's the reason.

✓ So I use my computer every day and that's the reason.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal; 'every day' (two words) is the correct adverbial phrase meaning each day.