Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，句子结构应更清晰自然。可以直接回答问题，然后简要说明原因，避免冗长和不连贯。

例: Yes, I write a lot because I am majoring in English, which requires me to write essays regularly. In the past, I didn't write much, but now I enjoy it because it helps me improve my skills.

提案: 回答时应注意用词准确，避免重复（如“good good”），并使用连接词使句子更流畅。可以具体说明写日记的好处。

例: I like to write diaries because they help me improve my memory and record important events in my life. For example, when I forget something, I can check my diary to remind myself.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。应更清晰地表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词。

例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time because people's opinions develop as they grow up. For example, when I look at my old writings from primary school, I find them childish and unrealistic.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达不清晰。应避免口语化的填充词，使用完整句子并清楚说明理由。

例: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the feel of the paper and it helps me remember information better. Typing on a keyboard is faster but sometimes makes it harder to retain what I write.

× I like to write Diaries because it is a good action for human beings to improve their memory and I think it is also a good good tool for us to record our life.

✓ I like to write diaries because it is a good action for human beings to improve their memory and I think it is also a good tool for us to record our life.

“Diaries”作为复数名词，首字母不应大写，且前面不需要大写。英文中普通名词复数形式首字母一般小写。

× So for example, when I get aware, I can remind things according to my diary.

✓ So for example, when I become aware, I can remember things according to my diary.

“get aware”用法错误，正确表达应为“become aware”。此外，“remind things”用法不当，应为“remember things”。

× people's opinion will weary and they grow up.

✓ people's opinions will vary and they grow up.

“opinion”应为复数“opinions”，且“weary”用词错误，应为“vary”，表示“变化”。

× I have watched something that I bought in primary school.

✓ I have seen something that I bought in primary school.

“watched”通常用于观看电影、电视等，表达看到某物应使用“seen”。

× it has some immature ideas and some dreams that seems not practical.

✓ it has some immature ideas and some dreams that seem not practical.

“dreams”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“seem”。

× because I very like the texture of the paper when you're crossing around it.

✓ because I really like the texture of the paper when you're crossing over it.

“very like”用法错误，应为“really like”；“crossing around it”表达不清，应为“crossing over it”。

× Yes, and another sign on on the other side.

✓ Yes, and another sign on the other side.

重复使用“on”是错误，应去掉多余的“on”。

× Typing will sometimes decrease your ability to remember things now because you just need to type in on the keyboard and without syncing, Yes.

✓ Typing will sometimes decrease your ability to remember things now because you just need to type on the keyboard and without syncing, yes.

“type in on the keyboard”中“in”多余，应去掉。