Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且内容相关，但可以更简洁，避免重复表达，如“jot down something”与“organize my thoughts”有些重复。建议用更具体的例子来丰富答案。

例: Yes, I write frequently, especially during classes to take notes or when planning projects to keep my ideas organized and clear.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达上的小错误，如重复“I I”，且表达不够流畅。建议使用更自然的表达，并补充具体细节说明为什么写这些内容能提升幸福感。

例: I like to write about happy memories and people I'm grateful for because reflecting on these helps me feel more positive and appreciative in daily life.

提案: 回答内容丰富且结构清晰，但部分句子表达不够地道，如“some names of my favorite movies”。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意时态一致。

例: Yes, what I write changes with my life stages. As a child, I used to note down the titles of my favorite movies to remember them, but now I mainly write to-do lists to organize my daily tasks.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“typing is much convenient”应为“much more convenient”，且“can't play very fast”表达不明确。建议改进语法并用更准确的词汇表达观点。

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because I'm used to it and it helps me feel more connected to my writing. Although typing is more convenient, I'm not very fast at it yet.

× I often jot down something while I'm listening to the class or planning something new so I can organize my thoughts and stay focused.

✓ I often jot down things while I'm listening to the class or planning something new so I can organize my thoughts and stay focused.

这里的'something'用在表示不确定的单数事物，但句意是指经常记下一些内容，应该用复数'things'，表示多项内容。

× Well, As for me, I I would prefer to write down some happy memories and someone I'm grateful for because it can boost my happiness.

✓ Well, as for me, I would prefer to write down some happy memories and someone I'm grateful to because it can boost my happiness.

句中重复出现'I I'，应删除一个'I'。此外，'someone I'm grateful for'中的'for'用法不当，正确表达应为'grateful to someone'，表示对某人感激。

× When I was a kid I really loved to write down some names of my favorite movies so I can remember them easily.

✓ When I was a kid I really loved to write down the names of my favorite movies so I could remember them easily.

'some names'在此处不太合适，应该用定冠词'the names'表示特指喜欢的电影名称。

× When I was a kid I really loved to write down some names of my favorite movies so I can remember them easily.

✓ When I was a kid I really loved to write down the names of my favorite movies so I could remember them easily.

句子描述过去的情况，后半句应使用过去时态的情态动词'could'，而不是现在时的'can'。

× But now I mostly make To Do List.

✓ But now I mostly make To Do Lists.

'To Do List'应为复数形式'To Do Lists'，表示多项待办事项列表。

× I prefer to write on the paper because I really get used to it and I feel more connected to what I write.

✓ I prefer to write on paper because I really get used to it and I feel more connected to what I write.

'on the paper'中的定冠词'the'不必要，习惯用法是'write on paper'，表示在纸上写字。

× Although I would say typing is much convenient but I just can't play very fast.

✓ Although I would say typing is much more convenient, I just can't type very fast.

'much convenient'应改为比较级'much more convenient'。此外，'play very fast'用词错误，应为'type very fast'。句中'Although'和'but'不能同时使用，应去掉'but'。