Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to keep your response concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I write quite often because I am a high school student. Besides my schoolwork, I enjoy writing stories and recording my dreams in my free time.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and unclear expressions, such as "it's a kind of address." Try to use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I like to record my dreams because it helps me be creative and sometimes inspires new ideas. Additionally, I enjoy writing my own stories as a way to express myself.

提案: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes like "varieties of things." Try to be more specific and use correct grammar. Also, provide a clearer explanation with linking words.

例: I don't think the things I write will change much because I write about different topics, including my ideas and everyday problems I notice.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear, especially the phrase "improve my handwriting during handwriting." Try to avoid repetition and clarify your points with better vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because it allows me to express myself more personally, and I enjoy practicing to improve my penmanship.

× I write almost everyday and also in my free time I like to write some stories made by myself and I also like to record my dreams.

✓ I write almost every day and also in my free time I like to write some stories made by myself and I also like to record my dreams.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'common' or 'normal', but the correct adverb to indicate frequency is 'every day' (two words). Using 'everyday' here is incorrect because it does not express the intended meaning of 'each day'. To improve, use 'every day' when referring to frequency.

× I'd like to record my dreams because it allows me to be creative and sometimes it can even inspired me to create some new ideas.

✓ I'd like to record my dreams because it allows me to be creative and sometimes it can even inspire me to create some new ideas.

The verb 'inspired' is incorrectly used in past tense after the modal verb 'can'. Modal verbs like 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Therefore, 'inspired' should be corrected to 'inspire'. To improve, always use the base form of the verb after modal verbs.

× I also want to create my own stories because it's a kind of address.

✓ I also want to create my own stories because it's a kind of expression.

The word 'address' is incorrectly used here; it does not fit the context. The student likely meant 'expression' to convey that creating stories is a way to express oneself. To improve, choose words that accurately reflect the intended meaning in context.

× I write varieties of things.

✓ I write a variety of things.

The phrase 'varieties of things' is incorrect because 'variety' is a singular noun that should be preceded by 'a' when referring to different kinds of something. 'Varieties' is plural and usually refers to types of a specific item. To improve, use 'a variety of' when talking about different kinds of things in general.

× I also write some ideas and some problems I find in the everyday life.

✓ I also write some ideas and some problems I find in everyday life.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'everyday life' because 'everyday life' is a general concept and does not require an article. To improve, omit 'the' when referring to general concepts like 'everyday life'.

× I also like to improve my handwriting during handwriting.

✓ I also like to improve my handwriting by practicing handwriting.

The preposition 'during' is incorrectly used here. 'During' refers to a period of time, but the sentence intends to express the method of improvement. 'By' is the correct preposition to indicate the means or method. To improve, use 'by' when indicating how something is done.