Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达了写作的情感功能，但语言表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me express my emotions and understand different feelings in life. Writing also improves my language skills.

提案: 回答内容重复且表达不够连贯，语法和词汇使用有误。建议使用连词连接句子，避免重复，具体说明写日记的原因。

例: I like to write diaries because they allow me to express my emotions and record interesting events that happen every day.

提案: 回答中多次使用“maybe”，显得不确定且重复，句子结构不清晰。建议明确表达观点，使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I think my writing will change. Currently, I write about campus life, but in the future, when I start working, my topics will be different.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不完整且不连贯。建议简化句子，清晰表达偏好及原因，避免模糊表达。

例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and reminds me of the past. Typing feels less emotional to me.

× writing can make my words more literacy

✓ writing can make my words more literary

这里的 'literacy' 是名词，意思是识字能力，而句子需要一个形容词来修饰 'words'，正确的形容词是 'literary'，表示文学的。

× I like to write diary because I think I can express my different emotions by writing Diaries.

✓ I like to write diaries because I think I can express my different emotions by writing diaries.

'diary' 是可数名词，表示日记，复数形式是 'diaries'。这里表示喜欢写多篇日记，应该用复数形式。

× I have a lot of funny things and I want to write it.

✓ I have a lot of funny things and I want to write them.

'things' 是复数，指代时应该用复数代词 'them'，而不是单数 'it'。

× when I got to a job maybe something will be changed.

✓ when I get a job maybe something will change.

这里描述的是将来可能发生的事情，应该用一般现在时 'get' 表示将来时间状语从句，'will change' 表示将来时，'be changed' 是被动语态，不符合语境。

× I prefer to handwriting when I am writing

✓ I prefer handwriting when I am writing

'prefer' 后面直接跟动名词或名词，不能加介词 'to'。这里 'handwriting' 是名词，直接用即可。

× and I think typing happened the emotions and.

✓ and I think typing loses the emotions.

原句结构混乱，'happened the emotions' 不符合英语表达习惯，应该用 'loses the emotions' 表达打字失去情感的意思，且句尾不应有多余的 'and'。