Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer to the question first, then add brief supporting details. Avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and unclear expressions such as 'Well if work folks.' Keep your sentences concise and coherent.

例: I don't write very often. Usually, I jot down random ideas or notes related to my work. Writing isn't really my favourite activity; I prefer reading because it's more relaxing.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid repetition of phrases like 'you know.' Also, use precise vocabulary such as 'sorting tasks' instead of 'shorting tasks' and 'completed' instead of 'crushed.'

例: I like to write plans because they help me organise my tasks and stay focused. By jotting them down, I can easily see what I have completed and what still needs to be done, which boosts my productivity.

提案: Give a more developed answer with reasons or examples. Avoid vague expressions like 'Who knows' and use linking words to make your response coherent. Try to express your thoughts clearly and confidently.

例: Yes, I think the things I write might change in the future. For example, I might start writing personal notes or journals to record my experiences and thoughts.

提案: Answer the question directly and explain your preference with clear reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I loved a few of pen on paper.' Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the feeling of pen on paper. It is a habit of mine, and I find it helps me concentrate better than typing.

× Honestly, I hardly write much you know?

✓ Honestly, I hardly write much, you know?

The original sentence lacks a comma before 'you know', which is a parenthetical phrase. Adding the comma improves sentence clarity and flow.

× I just draw down random thoughts or ideas sometimes.

✓ I just jot down random thoughts or ideas sometimes.

The phrase 'draw down' is incorrect in this context. The correct phrasal verb is 'jot down', meaning to write briefly. This correction improves accuracy and clarity.

× Well if work folks.

✓ Well, if it works, folks.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it' and a comma clarifies the meaning, making it a conditional statement.

× Me too.

✓ Me too.

This sentence is acceptable as a short response and does not require correction.

× I will write something not really my thing.

✓ I will write something, but it's not really my thing.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks conjunctions. Adding 'but' and a comma connects the ideas properly.

× I like reading some books to be fair, it's more relaxed.

✓ I like reading books to be fair; it's more relaxing.

'Some books' is less natural here; 'reading books' is more general. Also, 'relaxed' should be 'relaxing' to describe the activity.

× Maybe plans.

✓ Maybe plans.

As a short answer, this is acceptable and does not require correction.

× You know jotting down them makes it easy to tick off what I have crushed and what I have left, which can improve my productivity.

✓ You know, jotting them down makes it easy to tick off what I have completed and what I have left, which can improve my productivity.

The pronoun 'them' should come before the verb 'down' in 'jotting them down'. Also, 'crushed' is informal and unclear; 'completed' is more appropriate.

× Maybe.

✓ Maybe.

This short answer is acceptable and does not require correction.

× Who knows what the future brings, You know, I might even try writing a note someday.

✓ Who knows what the future brings? You know, I might even try writing a note someday.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a comma instead of a question mark after 'brings'. Correct punctuation improves clarity.

× Well, I love handwriting, you know, I loved a few of pen on paper.

✓ Well, I love handwriting, you know. I love putting pen to paper.

The original sentence is confusing and contains tense inconsistency. 'Loved a few of pen on paper' is incorrect; 'putting pen to paper' is the correct idiom.

× It's totally my habit.

✓ It's totally my habit.

This sentence is acceptable and does not require correction.