Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然流畅。

例: No, I don't write a lot. Although I have to write essays for my studies, I usually only write when preparing for exams.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达不清晰，存在语法和词汇错误。建议明确表达喜欢写什么，并说明原因，使用连词连接句子。

例: At first, I liked writing simple sentences about my school subjects based on what my teacher taught. Now, I enjoy writing short stories in my free time because it helps me express my creativity.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，清晰说明写作内容和能力会随着经历而变化。

例: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time. As I gain more experience, both my writing skills and the topics I choose will improve and evolve.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议简洁明了地表达偏好，并说明原因，使用连词使句子连贯。

例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient. Nowadays, many people choose typing since we can write anywhere using electronic devices.

× Actually not, although I'm a student that need to write some essays, but I don't usually do this except that I had much to do it for example for the exams of some.

✓ Actually not, although I'm a student that needs to write some essays, I don't usually do this except when I have much to do, for example for some exams.

主语是单数'student'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'needs'。此外，句子中'but'与前面否定句重复，改为省略更自然。

× Actually, in the starting time I like writing some bicycle sentence about our subjects from the from the knowledge of my teacher.

✓ Actually, at the beginning, I liked writing some simple sentences about our subjects based on the knowledge from my teacher.

'in the starting time'表达不自然，改为'at the beginning'。'bicycle sentence'可能是误用，改为'simple sentences'更合适。动词时态应与上下文一致，过去时'liked'更合适。

× But in the daily life I now write some simple novels or sentences.

✓ But in daily life, I now write some simple novels or sentences.

'in the daily life'中'daily life'前不需要冠词。

× Yes, oh many things about it can be changed, for example, the ability to write and the content.

✓ Yes, many things about it can change, for example, the ability to write and the content.

'can be changed'被动语态不太合适，改为主动语态'can change'更自然。

× With we experience many things our ideas is changing so that let our world.

✓ As we experience many things, our ideas are changing, which lets our world change.

主语'our ideas'是复数，谓语动词应为'are'而非'is'。句子结构不完整，补充连接词使句子通顺。

× Actually, when I pray for typing because of its convenience, nowadays more and more people choose to this way as me typing is more convenient for us.

✓ Actually, I prefer typing because of its convenience. Nowadays, more and more people choose this way like me; typing is more convenient for us.

'pray for typing'用词错误，应为'prefer typing'。'choose to this way'结构错误，改为'choose this way'。句子断裂，调整为完整句子。

× We can write with them everywhere and.

✓ We can write with them everywhere.

句子末尾多余的'and'导致句子不完整，应删除。