Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding awkward phrases like 'articles of roses' and improve sentence structure. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I often write posts on social media to share my feelings and thoughts. I find it a good way to express myself and improve my communication skills.

提案: Clarify your meaning by using correct vocabulary and grammar. Explain clearly what 'process' means in this context and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer writing personal reflections because I can freely express my feelings without worrying about strict structure. This allows my emotions to flow naturally.

提案: Improve clarity by using correct tenses and vocabulary. Explain your future plans more clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I used to write personal reflections, but in the future, I want to try writing novels because I enjoy reading them and hope to become a novelist one day.

提案: Use clearer and more natural expressions. Avoid confusing phrases like 'low method to authority' and explain your preference with specific reasons and linking words.

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient for expressing ideas. Handwriting feels outdated and slower compared to typing.

× Yes, I always post some articles of roses on social media website to share with people about my feelings and emotions and I think it's a good way to express myself and strengthen my communication skills.

✓ Yes, I always post some articles about roses on social media websites to share my feelings and emotions with people, and I think it's a good way to express myself and strengthen my communication skills.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used with 'articles of roses'; it should be 'articles about roses'. Also, 'on social media website' should be pluralized to 'on social media websites' to indicate the general platform. Additionally, 'share with people about my feelings' is awkward; the correct phrase is 'share my feelings with people'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I prefer to write process as I mentioned about the things.

✓ I prefer to write process essays as I mentioned about things.

The phrase 'write process' is incomplete; it should be 'write process essays' to specify the type of writing. Also, 'mentioned about the things' is incorrect; 'mentioned things' is correct because 'mention' does not require 'about'. This correction clarifies the meaning and fixes preposition misuse.

× I can share my feelings and emotions without thinking about the structure of this article.

✓ I can share my feelings and emotions without thinking about the structure of the article.

The phrase 'this article' is less appropriate here; 'the article' is better as it refers generally to the type of writing. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Just let my emotions move naturally and without it.

✓ I just let my emotions flow naturally without controlling them.

The phrase 'and without it' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Replacing it with 'without controlling them' clarifies the meaning and corrects the conjunction usage.

× Yes, I wrote a lot of process the day before, but in the future I also want to try the novels since I read a lot of novels in the past days and I wanted to be a novelist in the future.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of process essays the day before, but in the future, I also want to try writing novels since I have read a lot of novels recently and I want to be a novelist in the future.

The phrase 'wrote a lot of process' is incomplete; it should be 'wrote a lot of process essays'. 'The day before' is better as 'recently' or 'the other day'. 'Try the novels' should be 'try writing novels'. 'In the past days' is better as 'recently'. 'I wanted' should be 'I want' to maintain present tense for future aspirations. These corrections fix tense and word choice errors.

× I think typing is more efficient way to express your idea in a short time.

✓ I think typing is a more efficient way to express your ideas in a short time.

The phrase 'more efficient way' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'your idea' should be plural 'your ideas' to generalize the statement. These corrections improve article usage and noun agreement.

× And a handwriting nowadays is a low method to authority, so much of the efficiency I prefer typing.

✓ And handwriting nowadays is an outdated method, so for efficiency, I prefer typing.

The phrase 'a handwriting' is incorrect; 'handwriting' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Low method to authority' is unclear and incorrect; 'outdated method' conveys the intended meaning. 'So much of the efficiency' is awkward; 'so for efficiency' is better. These corrections fix article misuse and improve clarity.