Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I write quite often. For example, I sometimes post emails or messages on my social media to share my feelings. Also, when I was in high school, I regularly wrote articles and shared them with my classmates.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Use a clear topic sentence and explain your preference with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to clarify your ideas.

例: I like to write about my personal experiences and feelings because I often don't have specific topics. Writing helps me express my thoughts and emotions clearly.

提案: Make your answer more concise and organized. Start with a clear statement, then explain your future writing goals with specific details. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: Yes, I have written many personal pieces before, but in the future, I hope to write novels. I want to become a novelist and write many stories.

提案: Clarify your preference and reasons clearly. Use correct vocabulary and avoid confusing phrases. Start with a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons using linking words.

例: I prefer typing because it is faster than handwriting. This allows me to express my ideas and feelings quickly, which helps my writing flow smoothly.

× And sometimes I posted some, uh, emails in the fields of my social media website to share about my emotions.

✓ And sometimes I post some, uh, emails in the fields of my social media website to share about my emotions.

The sentence is describing a habitual action, so the present tense 'post' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'posted'. Using past tense here incorrectly suggests the action is no longer happening.

× And uh, before that, when I was in my high school, I always wrote some articles and shared them with my classmates.

✓ And uh, before that, when I was in high school, I always wrote some articles and shared them with my classmates.

The phrase 'in my high school' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'in high school'. This is a usage issue rather than a grammar tense issue, but the past tense 'wrote' and 'shared' are correct here because it refers to a past time.

× I prefer to write a process because I'm most in most of the time I don't have a topic to write about something.

✓ I prefer to write prose because most of the time I don't have a topic to write about.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect structure. 'Write a process' is incorrect; likely the intended word is 'prose'. Also, 'I'm most in most of the time' is ungrammatical and redundant. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I just want to present my inventions and feelings so it's good.

✓ I just want to present my thoughts and feelings, so it's good.

The word 'inventions' is likely a misuse; 'thoughts' fits better in this context. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs a comma before 'so'. This correction improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I wrote a lot of process in the past days, but if I have opportunity, I want to try to to write a novel.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot of prose in the past, but if I have the opportunity, I want to try to write a novel.

'Process' should be 'prose'. 'In the past days' is awkward; 'in the past' is better. 'If I have opportunity' needs the article 'the' before 'opportunity'. Also, 'to to' is a typo and should be 'to'. These corrections fix tense, article usage, and word choice.

× OK, write a lot of a lot of novels and also want to be a novelist in the future.

✓ OK, I want to write a lot of novels and also want to be a novelist in the future.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb at the start. Adding 'I want to' clarifies the future intention. This fixes sentence structure and tense.

× I prefer Taipei since Taiping is faster than handwrite and I can express my feelings and ideas in a short time that ensures the smooth sea of writing.

✓ I prefer typing since typing is faster than handwriting and I can express my feelings and ideas in a short time, which ensures the smooth flow of writing.

'Taipei' and 'Taiping' are incorrect words; the intended word is 'typing'. 'Handwrite' should be 'handwriting'. 'That ensures the smooth sea of writing' is incorrect; it should be 'which ensures the smooth flow of writing'. These corrections fix word choice and pronoun use for clarity.