Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了主要意思，但语言不够自然，有些表达不准确，例如“recall it on computer”不符合英语习惯。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并且回答可以更简洁。

例: No, I don't write much on paper these days because I find typing on a computer much more convenient.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的地方，如“let me don't forget it”和“go outside with friends”。建议使用更准确的语法和丰富细节，使表达更流畅。

例: I like to write a diary on my computer because it helps me remember important events, especially special occasions like going out with friends.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“don't like write too much things”，且表达重复。建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的语法，并提供更具体的理由。

例: No, I don't think what I write changes because my diary entries are personal records that stay the same over time.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但语言有些简单且不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富理由。

例: I prefer typing because it's more convenient; I can quickly record my thoughts on a computer or smartphone without needing paper.

× If I want to write something, I will recall it on computer.

✓ If I want to write something, I will write it on the computer.

这里动词'recall'用错了，应该用'write'表示写作动作。'recall'是回忆的意思，不符合语境。建议用'write'替换。

× Sometimes I will write some diary in my computer.

✓ Sometimes I will write a diary on my computer.

写日记时，应该用介词'on'表示在电脑上写，而不是'in'。另外，'diary'是可数名词，前面需要冠词'a'。

× I can record something important and let me don't forget it.

✓ I can record something important so that I don't forget it.

这里'let me don't forget it'结构不正确，应该用' so that I don't forget it'表示目的。'let me don't'语法错误。

× Especially in some special things like go outside with friends.

✓ Especially special things like going outside with friends.

'in some special things'用法不当，应该直接说'special things'。'go'应改为动名词'going'，表示活动。

× No, I don't think so. To be honest, I don't like write too much things, so I think diary is the most important for me.

✓ No, I don't think so. To be honest, I don't like to write too many things, so I think the diary is the most important for me.

'like write'应为'like to write'，'too much things'应为'too many things'因为'things'是可数名词。'diary'前应加定冠词'the'。

× I only write it and I think it won't change.

✓ I only write it and I think it won't change.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× It's just a Daily Record.

✓ It's just a daily record.

'Daily'作为形容词应小写，除非是专有名词。

× One of the most important reason is it's very convenient.

✓ One of the most important reasons is that it's very convenient.

'One of the most important reason'应为复数'reasons'，且句子中缺少连接词'that'。

× I like to record it on computer or smartphone.

✓ I like to record it on the computer or smartphone.

'computer'前应加定冠词'the'，表示特指。

× I don't like handwriting because it's too complicated.

✓ I don't like handwriting because it's too complicated.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× I have to find some paper.

✓ I have to find some paper.

此句语法正确，无需修改。