Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时时态使用不够准确，且表达略显冗长。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，同时简化句子结构，使回答更自然流畅。

例: I used to write a lot during primary school because I kept a diary and enjoyed sharing my thoughts with my mom. However, now I rarely find time to write due to my busy studies and activities.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但“dairy”拼写错误，应为“diary”。建议注意拼写准确性，同时可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was a child, I used to keep a diary where I recorded daily events and simple thoughts. Now, I mainly write academic essays related to my major because they are important for my studies, and sometimes I write for competitions or events.

提案: 时态使用不准确，且表达不够连贯。建议注意时态一致性，使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时丰富细节描述。

例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because my ideas and interests evolve as I grow. For example, when I was a child, I wanted to be an artist performing on TV shows, but now I aspire to be a lawyer who helps disadvantaged people protect their rights.

提案: 回答较好，但可以增加更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时丰富词汇表达。

例: Actually, it depends. I prefer handwriting when I keep my diary because it feels more sentimental and personal. However, I usually type academic essays since it is faster and more efficient, especially when I have a lot of work to complete.

× so I really find time to write.

✓ so I really found time to write.

这里描述的是过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“find”，应改为过去时态“found”。

× I kept diary every day

✓ I kept a diary every day

“diary”是可数名词，表示一本日记，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。

× I used to keep dairy and I recorded daily events and some simple thoughts.

✓ I used to keep a diary and I recorded daily events and some simple thoughts.

“dairy”是“乳制品”的意思，应该是“diary”（日记），且“diary”是可数名词，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。

× my ideas and interests evolved as I grow.

✓ my ideas and interests evolve as I grow.

这里描述的是一般现在时的事实，应该用一般现在时“evolve”，而不是过去时“evolved”。

× when I was a child I want to be an artist who can perform on TV show

✓ when I was a child I wanted to be an artist who could perform on TV shows

描述过去的愿望，应该用过去时“wanted”，且“TV show”应为复数“TV shows”，表示电视节目。

× now I just want to be a lawyer who can help disadvantaged people to protect their rights.

✓ now I just want to be a lawyer who can help disadvantaged people protect their rights.

动词“help”后面接动词时，通常不加“to”，直接用动词原形。

× I like handwriting when I keep my diary because it is more sentimental and personal.

✓ I like handwriting when I keep my diary because it is more sentimental and personal.

此句无语法错误，符合语法规则。

× I usually type because it is much faster and more efficient, especially when I have a lot of work to finish.

✓ I usually type because it is much faster and more efficient, especially when I have a lot of work to finish.

此句无语法错误，符合语法规则。