Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答比较自然，但有些句子稍显冗长，建议简化表达并增加连接词，使回答更流畅。例如，可以用“because”连接原因，避免重复。

例: No, I don't write a lot because I find it time-consuming and challenging. Instead, I usually use digital methods like text messages and voice notes. I only write when necessary, such as planning my work assignments.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当（如“cost of actions”应为“course of actions”），建议注意词汇准确性，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I like to write plans for my work assignments because jotting down my course of actions helps me be more effective and improve how I do things in the office.

提案: 回答内容具体且结构清晰，但可以用更自然的表达方式，如用“since”连接原因，避免重复“write”。

例: I don't think the things I write would change since I mainly plan my work actions. Because my schedule is quite monotonous, I often write similar things repeatedly.

提案: 回答简洁且表达清楚，但可以用连接词如“because”使句子更自然流畅，同时避免“tedious exercise”这种稍显书面化的表达。

例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster than handwriting, which I find slow and tiring.

× I find writing to be time consuming and challenging.

✓ I find writing to be time-consuming and challenging.

The phrase 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as a compound adjective before a noun or complement. This clarifies that 'time-consuming' is a single descriptive term.

× I like to write my plans for any work assignment that I have.

✓ I like writing my plans for any work assignment that I have.

After verbs like 'like', the gerund form ('writing') is often preferred when referring to general preferences or habits, making the sentence sound more natural.

× Jotting down my cost of actions at work will will help me be more effective and improve the way of doing things in my office.

✓ Jotting down my course of actions at work will help me be more effective and improve the way of doing things in my office.

The phrase 'cost of actions' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'course of actions'. Also, 'course' is singular but here it should be plural 'courses' or better 'course of action' as a fixed phrase. The repeated 'will' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'will'.

× Jotting down my cost of actions at work will will help me be more effective and improve the way of doing things in my office.

✓ Jotting down my course of action at work will help me be more effective and improve the way of doing things in my office.

The correct fixed phrase is 'course of action' (singular), not 'cost of actions'. Also, the repeated 'will' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'will'.

× I think the things I write wouldn't change because I mainly focus on planning whatever course of action that I'm going to do at work.

✓ I think the things I write won't change because I mainly focus on planning whatever course of action I'm going to take at work.

The contraction 'wouldn't' is incorrect here because the sentence refers to a future or general prediction; 'won't' (will not) is appropriate. Also, 'do' is less precise than 'take' in the phrase 'course of action'.

× So being exposed to a monotonous schedule, I only write the same things over and over.

✓ Since I am exposed to a monotonous schedule, I only write the same things over and over.

The phrase 'being exposed to' is awkward here; 'since I am exposed to' or 'because I am exposed to' better expresses the causal relationship. Also, 'being exposed to' is a participial phrase that can cause ambiguity in this context.

× I prefer typing compared to handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting.

The verb 'prefer' is followed by 'to' when comparing two things, not 'compared to'. Therefore, 'prefer typing to handwriting' is correct.