Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, I write a lot because I have a poor memory and tend to forget important things. Writing helps me remember them better.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（dairy应为diary），句子表达不够流畅，建议注意拼写并使用连贯的句子结构。

例: I like to write about my daily life because I keep a diary. It helps me remember interesting events, and I can enjoy reading it when I am older.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚表达观点。

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I grow older and learn more. My thoughts and writing skills will improve over time.

提案: 存在语法错误和用词不当（costed应为cost，ride应为write），表达不够自然。建议注意时态和词汇的正确使用。

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient. Before smartphones, I used to write by hand, which took more time and made me tired.

× I will forget a lot of important things and makes many efforts.

✓ I will forget a lot of important things and make many efforts.

主谓一致错误。主语是复数（I），谓语动词应使用原形make，而不是makes。

× So to avoid this I choose to write a lot and keep it in my mind.

✓ So to avoid this I choose to write a lot and keep it in my mind.

此句中“keep it in my mind”表达不准确，通常应说“keep it in mind”或“remember it”。但根据题目要求只纠正列出的语法错误，故不修改。

× I like to write my daily life because I have a habit of writing my dairy.

✓ I like to write about my daily life because I have a habit of writing my diary.

单词拼写错误，dairy（乳制品）应为diary（日记）。此外，动词write后应加介词about表示“写关于……”。

× My dairies can help me remember some interesting things that happened during my life.

✓ My diaries can help me remember some interesting things that happened during my life.

单词拼写错误，dairies应为diaries，表示“日记”的复数形式。

× When I am old, I can have it fun.

✓ When I am old, I can have fun.

短语“have fun”中不需要it，it是多余的。

× Yes, I do, because I think by the elderly I am and I have learn more knowledge.

✓ Yes, I do, because I think as I get older I learn more knowledge.

“by the elderly I am”表达不正确，应使用“as I get older”表示“随着我变老”。“I have learn”时态错误，应为“I learn”或“I have learned”。

× I think in this way my mind and my writing level will have a dramatic development.

✓ I think in this way my mind and my writing level will develop dramatically.

“will have a dramatic development”表达不自然，改为“will develop dramatically”更符合英语习惯。

× Before the smart phones came out I used to handwriting.

✓ Before the smart phones came out I used to handwrite.

“used to”后应接动词原形，handwriting是名词，正确用法是handwrite。

× It costed a lot of time and made me feel very tired.

✓ It cost a lot of time and made me feel very tired.

动词cost的过去式与原形相同，不能用costed。

× By typing I can finish my ride very fast and efficiency.

✓ By typing I can finish my writing very fast and efficiently.

“ride”应为“writing”，且“fast”作为副词使用正确，“efficiency”是名词，应改为副词“efficiently”。