Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'Diaries' 앞에 관사 'my'를 사용한 것은 적절하나, 'Diaries'는 보통 복수형으로 쓰이지 않고 'diary'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 답변이 짧고 구체적인 이유가 부족합니다. 좀 더 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I write quite often because I find it helps me express my thoughts and reflect on my day. For example, I keep a daily diary where I note down important events and my feelings.

提案: 'a Diaries'와 'a journals'는 문법적으로 틀렸습니다. 'diary'와 'journal'은 셀 수 있는 명사로 단수형일 때는 관사 'a'를 붙이고, 복수형일 때는 관사를 빼야 합니다. 또한, 문장이 다소 어색하고 연결어가 부족합니다. 문장 연결을 위해 'because' 앞에 쉼표를 넣고, 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I like to write a diary about my daily mood because it helps me understand my emotions better. Also, I enjoy keeping a journal since it helps me organize my thoughts clearly.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고, 'writing my Diaries'에서 복수형 사용이 부적절합니다. 또한, 이유가 충분히 설명되지 않아 답변이 약합니다. 좀 더 구체적으로 자신의 생각을 설명하고, 문법적으로 올바른 표현을 사용하는 것이 필요합니다.

例: I don't think the topics I write about will change much because I mainly enjoy writing in my diary about my daily experiences and feelings.

提案: 'more fast'는 문법적으로 틀렸으며, 'band handwriting'은 'bad handwriting'의 오타로 보입니다. 문법과 철자 오류를 수정하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 것이 필요합니다. 또한, 답변이 다소 길고 중복된 부분이 있으므로 간결하게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typing is faster and my handwriting is quite bad, so I don't like looking at it.

× I enjoy writing my Diaries.

✓ I enjoy writing my diary.

'Diary' is a singular noun and should not be pluralized here. Also, 'diary' is usually uncountable or singular when referring to a personal journal. Using 'my diary' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× I like to write a Diaries about my daily mood.

✓ I like to write diaries about my daily mood.

'Diaries' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used. The correct form is to omit 'a' when using plural nouns.

× Also I enjoy writing a journals because it makes me keep organized my thoughts.

✓ Also, I enjoy writing journals because it helps me keep my thoughts organized.

'Journals' is plural, so 'a' is incorrect. Also, 'makes me keep organized my thoughts' is awkward; 'helps me keep my thoughts organized' is more natural.

× I don't think the things I write would change because I don't enjoy writing except writing my Diaries.

✓ I don't think the things I write will change because I don't enjoy writing except writing my diary.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here; 'will' is appropriate for future predictions. Also, 'my Diaries' should be 'my diary' as explained before.

× I prefer typing more than handwriting because typing allows me to write things more fast and also I really have a band handwriting so I don't like to see my handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting because typing allows me to write faster, and I have really bad handwriting, so I don't like to see it.

The phrase 'prefer typing more than handwriting' should be 'prefer typing to handwriting'. 'More fast' is incorrect; the correct comparative adverb is 'faster'. 'Band handwriting' is a typo and should be 'bad handwriting'. Also, the sentence is improved for clarity and naturalness.