Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中出现了语义混淆（将写作和阅读混淆），且表达不够自然流畅，重复使用“umm”影响流畅度。建议明确区分写作和阅读，避免语义错误，并减少口头语的使用。

例: No, I don't write a lot because technology has made typing more common than handwriting nowadays.

提案: 回答内容较为具体，但句子结构稍显重复，表达不够简洁。建议优化句子结构，避免重复表达，同时使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I enjoy writing calligraphy because I have studied it for about seven years since childhood, and I consider myself a calligrapher.

提案: 回答中多次使用“umm”和“maybe”，显得不够自信且表达不够流畅。建议减少口头语，增强表达的确定性，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe my writing style will change as I grow older because I will develop new ideas and preferences in calligraphy.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但用词如“joke”和“hilarious”显得不够正式。建议使用更恰当的词汇表达个人偏好，同时保持语气自然。

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because calligraphy is an art form that requires writing by hand, and typing cannot replicate its beauty.

× Umm, as the technology developing umm, I think typing is almost replace the writing, so I don't have to write for something.

✓ Umm, as the technology is developing, umm, I think typing almost replaces writing, so I don't have to write for anything.

这里缺少动词be的形式，应该用现在进行时"is developing"，表示技术正在发展。"typing is almost replace"中动词形式错误，主语是单数，谓语动词应为第三人称单数形式"replaces"。"write for something"表达不准确，应该用"write for anything"表示泛指。

× Honestly, I like to write calligraphy because I think I'm a calligrapher and I studied calligraphy for many years since I was a kid and about 7 years I think.

✓ Honestly, I like to write calligraphy because I think I'm a calligrapher and I have studied calligraphy for many years since I was a kid, about 7 years I think.

"studied"用过去式不合适，因为动作从过去持续到现在，应该用现在完成时"have studied"。

× Yes, I think it would change uh, maybe the writing style, umm, because as my age grew, umm, I think maybe I have some new idea or umm, new style I like.

✓ Yes, I think it will change, uh, maybe the writing style, umm, because as I grow older, umm, I think maybe I will have some new ideas or umm, new styles I like.

"would change"改为"will change"更符合对未来的预测。"as my age grew"时态不对，应该用现在时"as I grow older"。"I have some new idea"应为复数"ideas"，且未来可能出现，故用"will have"。

× Yes, I think it would change uh, maybe the writing style, umm, because as my age grew, umm, I think maybe I have some new idea or umm, new style I like.

✓ Yes, I think it will change, uh, maybe the writing style, umm, because as I grow older, umm, I think maybe I will have some new ideas or umm, new styles I like.

"idea"和"style"应使用复数形式"ideas"和"styles"，因为表达的是多种可能的新想法和新风格。

× So I will change the style right in calligraphy.

✓ So I will change the style in calligraphy.

"right in calligraphy"中"right"用法不当，应去掉，直接用"in calligraphy"表示在书法中。

× So if someone typing in calligraphy, I think it's a joke, it's hilarious.

✓ So if someone is typing in calligraphy, I think it's a joke, it's hilarious.

"someone typing"缺少助动词，应该用"someone is typing"，完整表达现在进行时。