Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意动词时态和单复数的正确使用，同时回答应更自然简洁，避免冗余。

例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially messages and articles, because writing is an important part of my exams, so I practice it regularly.

提案: 回答内容较好，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时注意词汇的准确性，如'diaries'应为复数形式。

例: I like to write daily diaries because they help me record my life experiences. Moreover, when I am older, I can look back and remember those moments clearly, which also helps me reflect and clear my mind.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达不准确的问题，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，并避免模糊表达。

例: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time because my writing reflects my experiences and attitudes, which evolve as I grow.

提案: 回答表达较为口语化且有语法错误，建议使用更正式和准确的表达，并注意冠词和词序的正确使用。

例: It depends on the situation. For example, at work, I prefer typing articles or reports because it is more convenient to send them as files to others.

× Yes, I have ride a lot of messages or articles because most of them is in the examination which is as a part of the examination content so I must tell you it to finish in the exam.

✓ Yes, I have written a lot of messages or articles because most of them are in the examination, which is part of the examination content, so I must tell you to finish it in the exam.

这里“messages or articles”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，而不是“is”。另外，“have ride”应为“have written”，因为“ride”是错误的动词形式。

× Yes, I have ride a lot of messages or articles because most of them is in the examination which is as a part of the examination content so I must tell you it to finish in the exam.

✓ Yes, I have written a lot of messages or articles because most of them are in the examination, which is part of the examination content, so I must tell you to finish it in the exam.

“have ride”中的“ride”时态错误，应使用过去分词“written”来构成现在完成时。

× Yes, I have ride a lot of messages or articles because most of them is in the examination which is as a part of the examination content so I must tell you it to finish in the exam.

✓ Yes, I have written a lot of messages or articles because most of them are in the examination, which is part of the examination content, so I must tell you to finish it in the exam.

“as a part of the examination content”中的“as”用法不当，应改为“part of the examination content”，表示“作为考试内容的一部分”。

× Yes, I have ride a lot of messages or articles because most of them is in the examination which is as a part of the examination content so I must tell you it to finish in the exam.

✓ Yes, I have written a lot of messages or articles because most of them are in the examination, which is part of the examination content, so I must tell you to finish it in the exam.

句中缺少逗号分隔定语从句，且“so I must tell you it to finish in the exam”表达不清，应调整为“so I must tell you to finish it in the exam”。

× I like to write some daily Diaries because it is a great way to record my life experiences while I am older.

✓ I like to write some daily diaries because they are a great way to record my life experiences when I am older.

“diaries”是复数，谓语和指代词应使用复数形式“they are”，而不是单数“it is”。

× I like to write some daily Diaries because it is a great way to record my life experiences while I am older.

✓ I like to write some daily diaries because they are a great way to record my life experiences when I am older.

“while I am older”用法不当，应使用“when I am older”表示“当我年纪大时”。

× I can look back and remember those moments clearly and the writing helps me to record a reflection and clear my mind.

✓ I can look back and remember those moments clearly, and writing helps me reflect and clear my mind.

“record a reflection”表达不自然，应改为“reflect”，且“the writing”改为“writing”更符合习惯用法。

× Ah yes, of course I believe the things I write would change significantly because the rights are based on your experiences and life attitude and so on.

✓ Ah yes, of course I believe the things I write would change significantly because the rights are based on your experiences and life attitudes and so on.

“life attitude”应为复数“life attitudes”，因为指多种生活态度。

× Ah yes, of course I believe the things I write would change significantly because the rights are based on your experiences and life attitude and so on.

✓ Ah yes, of course I believe the things I write would change significantly because the rights are based on my experiences and life attitudes and so on.

前文主语是“I”，此处应使用第一人称“my”而非第二人称“your”。

× So if you experience much and you will change it.

✓ So if you experience a lot, you will change.

“experience much”表达不自然，应改为“experience a lot”；“change it”中“it”指代不明，去掉更合适。

× Maybe it depends on different situations.

✓ Maybe it depends on different situations.

此句无错误，保持原句。

× For example, on the work I will type in the some articles or reports because it is very convenient to send it to others as files or other packages.

✓ For example, at work I will type some articles or reports because it is very convenient to send them to others as files or other packages.

“on the work”应为“at work”；“in the some articles”应为“some articles”；“send it”应为“send them”，因为指代复数。