Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some unnatural phrases and minor grammar errors, such as "roll postcards" which should be "write postcards". Also, try to avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Using linking words like "however" can improve coherence.

例: To be honest, I don't write very often because I usually type on my computer. However, when I'm travelling, I enjoy writing postcards or letters to my friends and family to keep in touch.

提案: Your answer attempts to explain your preferences but contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "personal feeling" and "craving short story". Try to use correct noun forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect ideas logically.

例: I enjoy writing personal reflections and short stories when I'm travelling because writing helps me process my experiences and emotions. Also, creating short stories allows me to express my creativity.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has multiple grammar and vocabulary mistakes, such as "my dream like want to be a president", "I'm my focus shop", and "I have become an engineering". These errors affect clarity. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words like "however" appropriately.

例: Definitely, the things I write have changed a lot since elementary school. When I was younger, I used to write about my dreams, like wanting to be a president, which reflected my interests at that time. However, now my focus has shifted, and I mostly write about engineering topics because I have become an engineer.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammar mistakes such as "when I typing", "I can quick add", and "typing allow me". Also, try to use linking words like "for example" and "additionally" correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement. Aim for more natural phrasing and concise sentences.

例: I prefer typing on a computer because it is much easier and more convenient than handwriting. For example, when I type, I don't need to worry about having a pen or paper, and I can quickly add to my work. Additionally, typing allows me to save and share documents quickly, which is very useful in everyday life.

× I love to roll postcards or letters to my friends and family to keep in touch.

✓ I love to write postcards or letters to my friends and family to keep in touch.

The verb 'roll' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'write' when referring to creating postcards or letters. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar form error, but it affects the verb usage in the sentence.

× I enjoy writing personal feeling and the short story while I'm traveling.

✓ I enjoy writing personal feelings and short stories while I'm traveling.

The nouns 'feeling' and 'story' should be plural ('feelings' and 'stories') because the speaker refers to multiple personal feelings and stories, not just one. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Writing personal thinking allowed me to reflect my daily experiences and emotions, which help me understand my life better.

✓ Writing personal thoughts allows me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions, which helps me understand my life better.

The phrase 'personal thinking' is incorrect; 'personal thoughts' is the correct noun phrase. Also, 'reflect' should be followed by 'on' to be grammatically correct. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'which' (referring to the act of writing). This involves verb + -ing form and subject-verb agreement issues.

× Additionally, craving short story, let me explain my creativity.

✓ Additionally, creating short stories lets me express my creativity.

The word 'craving' is incorrect; the intended word is 'creating'. Also, 'let me explain my creativity' is awkward; 'lets me express my creativity' is more natural. 'Short story' should be plural 'short stories' to match the context. This is an incorrect conjunction and word choice issue.

× When I was younger, I used to write about my dream like want to be a president, which reflects my interest at that time.

✓ When I was younger, I used to write about my dreams, like wanting to be a president, which reflected my interests at that time.

The noun 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' because it refers to multiple aspirations. 'Want' should be 'wanting' to function as a gerund after 'like'. 'Reflects' should be 'reflected' to match the past tense context. 'Interest' should be plural 'interests' to match the plural subject. This involves singular/plural and tense issues.

× However, I'm my focus shop and now I'm mostly writing about engineering topic because I have become an engineering.

✓ However, my focus has shifted and now I'm mostly writing about engineering topics because I have become an engineer.

The phrase 'I'm my focus shop' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'my focus has shifted'. 'Engineering topic' should be plural 'engineering topics'. 'I have become an engineering' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'engineer'. This involves incorrect pronoun use and noun form errors.

× I prefer typing on computer because it is much easier and convenient than handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing on the computer because it is much easier and more convenient than handwriting.

The phrase 'typing on computer' requires the definite article 'the' before 'computer'. Also, 'convenient' should be preceded by 'more' to form the comparative 'more convenient' to match 'easier'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and adjectives.

× For example, when I typing I don't need to worry about having a pen or paper and I can quick add my work.

✓ For example, when I am typing, I don't need to worry about having a pen or paper and I can quickly add to my work.

The verb 'typing' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense: 'when I am typing'. 'Quick' is an adjective; the adverb 'quickly' should be used to modify the verb 'add'. Also, 'add my work' is awkward; 'add to my work' is more natural. This involves verb tense and adverb usage issues.

× Additionally, typing allow me to save and share document quickly, which is very useful in everyday life.

✓ Additionally, typing allows me to save and share documents quickly, which is very useful in everyday life.

The verb 'allow' should be 'allows' to agree with the singular subject 'typing'. 'Document' should be plural 'documents' because it refers to multiple items. This is a subject-verb agreement and singular/plural issue.