Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中出现了明显的词汇错误（如将write误说成ride），且表达不够自然和连贯。建议加强词汇准确性，避免重复词汇，并且回答应直接回应问题。

例: Not really. I used to write a lot when I was a kid, but now I only write when I need to finish my homework or articles.

提案: 回答表达不够自然，语法和用词有误（如"write the diary"应为"write a diary"，"what I meant today"应为"what I did today"），且句子较长且缺少连贯的连接词。建议注意语法准确性，使用恰当的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I like to write a diary to record what I did, what I ate, and the activities I had each day, so I won't forget them after a long time.

提案: 回答中词汇和表达错误严重（如"what I ride"应为"what I wrote"，"the closet I had"不合适），句子结构混乱，难以理解。建议加强基础词汇和句型的准确使用，确保表达清晰。

例: Yes, the things I write have changed. When I was a child, I wrote about playing with friends and my daily life. Now, I write articles for college and plans for my future.

提案: 回答较为自然，但存在语法错误和重复词汇（如"I I"），表达不够简洁。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I prefer handwriting because I am not used to typing. I often make mistakes when typing, but writing by hand since childhood makes me feel relaxed and it's easier for me.

× I only ride when when I need to finish my homework or article.

✓ I only write when I need to finish my homework or an article.

这里动词用错了，题目问的是写作（write），但学生用了“ride”（骑），应改为“write”。另外，'article'前应加不定冠词'an'。

× I like to write the diary to record what I meant today, what I eat today and on the activities I have today so that I won't forget it after a long time.

✓ I like to write a diary to record what I meant today, what I ate today and the activities I had today so that I won't forget them after a long time.

“diary”前应使用不定冠词“a”，因为这里指的是一本日记而非特指的日记。动词时态应保持一致，'meant'应为'mean'的过去式'meant'，但这里应用过去时态，'eat'应改为过去式'eat'的过去式'eat'应为'ate'。'on the activities'应改为'the activities'。

× what I eat today

✓ what I ate today

这里描述的是过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去式，'eat'的过去式是'ate'。

× on the activities I have today

✓ the activities I had today

描述的是过去的活动，动词应使用过去式'had'。

× what I ride when I was a child was worried about playing with children and the closet I had.

✓ what I wrote when I was a child was about playing with children and the clothes I had.

这里动词用错了，'ride'应为'write'的过去式'wrote'。'closet'应为'clothes'（衣服），意思更符合上下文。

× the closet I had

✓ the clothes I had

'closet'是衣柜，语境中应指衣服，正确词为'clothes'，且为复数形式。

× I write about article for college and the future that I plan for myself.

✓ I write about articles for college and the future that I plan for myself.

'article'前应使用复数形式'articles'，因为这里指的是多篇文章。

× I can't get used to the typing.

✓ I can't get used to typing.

'get used to'后应接动名词形式，'the typing'中的定冠词'the'不必要，应去掉。

× I always make mistakes when I'm typing but I I write by my hand since I was a child and it made me feel relaxed and easy to do it.

✓ I always make mistakes when I'm typing, but I have been writing by hand since I was a child and it makes me feel relaxed and it's easy to do.

'write by my hand'应改为'write by hand'。时态应保持一致，'since I was a child'表示从过去持续到现在，应使用现在完成时'have been writing'。'made'应改为现在时'makes'，'easy to do it'应改为'it's easy to do'。