Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，且部分句子不连贯，建议注意语法结构，避免语句不完整，同时回答应更自然流畅。

例: Not really, I don't write much nowadays. However, when I was at school, I used to write love stories after class. They were quite varied and sometimes a bit chaotic. Now, I feel a little embarrassed about those writings.

提案: 回答内容较好，但可以增加连接词使句子更连贯，同时丰富细节，使表达更具体。

例: I love to write about my personal feelings, such as my experiences when I graduated or traveled, and even about love. When I read these writings later, they help me feel better and reflect on those moments.

提案: 回答较简短，缺少连接词和细节，建议使用连接词并详细说明感受的变化。

例: Yes, definitely. For example, when I graduated from university, I wrote that I felt sad because I was uncertain about the future. However, when I graduated with my master's degree, I felt calm and more confident, so my writings reflected those different emotions.

提案: 回答内容完整且自然，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更流畅，同时丰富细节。

例: When I was a kid, I preferred handwriting because we didn't have phones back then. My mom still keeps my old notebooks. However, now I prefer typing on apps on my phone because it's much easier and faster.

× I when I was at school I used to write love stories after class.

✓ When I was at school, I used to write love stories after class.

句子中“I when I was at school”结构混乱，缺少连词或标点，导致句子不通顺。应将“I”去掉或调整句子结构，使其符合英语语法习惯。建议使用“当我在学校时”作为句首状语，后接主句。

× They were society and alter and all over the place.

✓ They were messy and all over the place.

原句中“society”和“alter”用作形容词不合适，且词义不符。应使用形容词“messy”来表达“杂乱无章”的意思。建议选择合适的形容词来准确表达意思。

× When I graduated from university, I wrote I felt sad.

✓ When I graduated from university, I wrote that I felt sad.

句子中缺少连接词“that”，导致句子结构不完整。建议在“wrote”和后面的内容之间加上“that”以连接主句和宾语从句。

× But when I graduated my masters, I wrote I felt calm.

✓ But when I graduated from my master's, I wrote that I felt calm.

缺少介词“from”和所有格形式“master's”，且缺少连接词“that”，导致句子结构错误。建议补充介词和所有格，并加上连接词以使句子完整。