Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I write quite often because I am a student and need to complete many assignments. Writing helps me organize my thoughts and improve my language skills in daily life.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng câu trả lời có thể mạch lạc hơn bằng cách sử dụng liên từ hợp lý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Hãy chú ý cách dùng thì và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I enjoy writing funny stories from my daily life and keeping them in my diary. For example, I make it a habit to write in my diary every day because it helps me relax and feel happy. Moreover, I can look back at my entries to remember good moments.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn còn lặp từ và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp lại từ và giải thích rõ hơn về ý tưởng của mình.

例: Yes, I believe what I write can change because plans are not always perfect. For instance, I often write picnic plans, but sometimes things don't go as I expected.

提案: Câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và bị ngắt quãng. Bạn nên hoàn thành ý tưởng, tránh nói lặp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I prefer typing over handwriting because it is more convenient and faster. For example, typing helps me complete my tasks quickly and efficiently. However, sometimes I like handwriting when I want to be more creative.

× Yes, almost everyday I have to write a lawyer.

✓ Yes, almost every day I have to write to a lawyer.

The phrase 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace', but the correct adverbial phrase here is 'every day' (two words) meaning 'each day'. Also, the verb 'write' usually requires the preposition 'to' when indicating the recipient of the writing, so 'write to a lawyer' is correct.

× I usually expose to writing and if I write can help.

✓ I am usually exposed to writing and if I write, it can help.

The verb 'expose' requires the passive form 'be exposed to' when indicating being subjected to something. Also, the sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'can help' to be grammatically correct.

× Writing can help me a lot in a daily in a daily life.

✓ Writing can help me a lot in daily life.

The phrase 'in a daily in a daily life' is repetitive and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'in daily life' without the article 'a'.

× I would like to write the funny stories in my daily life and then keep them in my diary.

✓ I would like to write funny stories from my daily life and then keep them in my diary.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'funny stories' here. Since the stories are not specific or previously mentioned, no article is needed. Also, 'in my daily life' is better expressed as 'from my daily life' to indicate the source of the stories.

× I make it a habit to write my diary daily which it can be relaxing and happy.

✓ I make it a habit to write in my diary daily, which can be relaxing and make me happy.

The phrase 'write my diary' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'write in my diary'. Also, 'which it can be relaxing and happy' is ungrammatical; 'which can be relaxing and make me happy' is correct.

× Yes, I think the things I write will change and as there is nothing can be perfectly organized.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write will change because nothing can be perfectly organized.

The phrase 'and as there is nothing can be' is ungrammatical. It should be 'because nothing can be' to correctly express the reason.

× For example, the plan I I usually write the plan for my picnic trip and unfortunately the things that I predict in my in my paper is not right.

✓ For example, I usually write the plan for my picnic trip, and unfortunately, the things that I predict on my paper are not right.

The sentence has repetition ('the plan I I'), which is corrected. Also, 'predict in my paper' should be 'predict on my paper'. The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× When it comes to typing and handwriting, I will say typing is my best choice as it is really convenient and suitable for me.

✓ When it comes to typing and handwriting, I would say typing is my best choice as it is really convenient and suitable for me.

The modal verb 'will' is less appropriate here; 'would' is better to express preference or opinion in this context.

× For example, I find typing can help me do my task quickly and easily.

✓ For example, I find that typing can help me do my tasks quickly and easily.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' after 'find' to introduce the clause. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to generalize the statement.