Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors that affect clarity, such as confusing 'ride' with 'write'. To improve, ensure you use the correct vocabulary and structure your answer clearly and directly. Avoid redundancy and keep your response concise within 5 sentences.

例: No, I don't write very often. However, recently I have been writing more frequently because I need to practise for an important exam. Regular writing helps me improve my skills and boosts my confidence.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by adding linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and by expanding your explanation with more specific details.

例: I prefer to write about personal experiences and memorable events in my life because they are meaningful to me. For example, I often write about my childhood and school days, as these memories help me reflect on my growth and lessons learned.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors that affect clarity. To improve, avoid repeating words, use correct grammar, and organise your ideas logically with linking words. Also, be more specific in your explanations.

例: I usually write about my childhood and school days, which are unlikely to change since they are part of my past. However, when I write about future plans or predictions, these might change depending on how my life develops.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some redundancy and minor errors. To improve, avoid repeating phrases, use appropriate linking words, and maintain a natural flow in your response.

例: To be honest, I prefer typing because it is much faster and more convenient than handwriting. Additionally, my handwriting tends to be quite messy, which makes my work difficult to read.

× I regular ride can help me improve my writing skills and make me feel more confident.

✓ Regular riding can help me improve my writing skills and make me feel more confident.

The phrase 'I regular ride' is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is to use the gerund 'riding' with the adjective 'regular' to form 'regular riding'. This functions as a noun phrase and fits the sentence structure properly.

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write about?

The verb 'write' often requires the preposition 'about' when referring to the topic or subject of writing. Omitting 'about' makes the sentence incomplete or unnatural.

× For me, I often write about my experience like the childhood and the school days.

✓ For me, I often write about my experiences like childhood and school days.

The word 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the examples given. Also, 'the' before 'childhood' and 'school days' is unnecessary because these are general concepts, not specific instances.

× So these things are unlikely to change because because it it part of my past.

✓ So these things are unlikely to change because they are part of my past.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here because it refers to a singular noun, but 'these things' is plural. The correct pronoun is 'they'. Also, the verb 'are' is needed to complete the clause.

× However, when I write about the future plan or the predict prediction, these things might change because which depend on how my life.

✓ However, when I write about future plans or predictions, these things might change because they depend on how my life goes.

The phrase 'the future plan or the predict prediction' is incorrect; it should be plural and without unnecessary articles: 'future plans or predictions'. The pronoun 'which' is incorrect here; 'they' should be used to refer to 'these things'. The sentence also needs completion for clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer typing because it's much faster and more convenient than the writing handwriting.

✓ To be honest, I prefer typing because it's much faster and more convenient than handwriting.

The phrase 'the writing handwriting' is redundant and incorrect. 'Handwriting' alone suffices as a noun here, and the definite article 'the' is unnecessary.

× Additional, my handwriting tends to be quite messy, sorry, which makes me which makes me miss my work, difficult to read.

✓ Additionally, my handwriting tends to be quite messy, which makes my work difficult to read.

'Additional' is an adjective; the correct adverb form is 'Additionally'. The phrase 'sorry' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. The repeated phrase 'which makes me' is redundant and should be removed. 'Miss my work' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that the work is difficult to read.