Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your sentences clear and direct.

例: Yes, I write daily, including to-do lists for my activities and notes for my work tasks. Additionally, I maintain a diary to record my personal thoughts.

提案: Improve your answer by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to add more specific reasons why you enjoy writing motivational speeches.

例: I enjoy writing motivational speeches because they inspire others. Therefore, I often post them on social media platforms like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp to reach a wider audience.

提案: Focus on clarity and coherence by structuring your answer better. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and avoid vague phrases. Also, correct grammar mistakes for better understanding.

例: Yes, I believe what I write changes over time because writing boosts my confidence. For example, I follow the saying that writing down problems helps solve half of them, which guides me in life.

提案: Make your answer more natural and fluent by using correct grammar and linking words. Clearly compare typing and handwriting with specific reasons to support your preference.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typing allows me to easily correct mistakes and save my work digitally. In contrast, handwriting requires carrying physical papers, which can be inconvenient.

× Yes, I write a lot of things on daily basis like making list of to do of my daily activities, addition to that one in my work to note down the regular tasks of my operations and deployments.

✓ Yes, I write a lot of things on a daily basis like making lists of to-dos of my daily activities, in addition to that, at my work, I note down the regular tasks of my operations and deployments.

The phrase 'on daily basis' requires the article 'a' to be correct as 'on a daily basis'. 'Making list' should be plural 'making lists' because multiple lists are implied. 'To do' should be 'to-dos' as a plural noun. 'Addition to that one' is incorrect; it should be 'in addition to that'. These corrections fix singular/plural and article usage errors.

× Yes, I write a lot of things on daily basis like making list of to do of my daily activities, addition to that one in my work to note down the regular tasks of my operations and deployments.

✓ Yes, I write a lot of things on a daily basis like making lists of to-dos of my daily activities, in addition to that, at my work, I note down the regular tasks of my operations and deployments.

The phrase 'addition to that one in my work' is incorrect; it should be 'in addition to that, at my work'. Prepositions 'in' and 'at' are needed to correctly express the relationship between the actions and locations.

× I have an habit of writing speeches and posting it in my social media applications like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp.

✓ I have a habit of writing speeches and posting them on my social media applications like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp.

The article 'an' before 'habit' is incorrect because 'habit' starts with a consonant sound; it should be 'a habit'. Also, 'posting it' should be 'posting them' to agree with the plural 'speeches'. 'Posting it in' should be 'posting them on' because we post content on platforms, not in them.

× I have an habit of writing speeches and posting it in my social media applications like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp.

✓ I have a habit of writing speeches and posting them on my social media applications like Instagram, Facebook, and WhatsApp.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'speeches' which is plural, so it should be 'them'. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' is the correct preposition for social media platforms.

× There is a quite that if you will write down our problem in a paper, half of our problem will be resolved.

✓ There is a quote that if you write down your problem on a paper, half of your problem will be resolved.

'A quite' is incorrect; the correct word is 'a quote'. 'If you will write' should be 'if you write' because 'if' clauses use present tense for future meaning. 'Our problem' should be 'your problem' to match the general statement. 'In a paper' should be 'on a paper' as we write on paper.

× There is a quite that if you will write down our problem in a paper, half of our problem will be resolved.

✓ There is a quote that if you write down your problem on a paper, half of your problem will be resolved.

In conditional sentences starting with 'if', the present simple tense is used instead of 'will' for future meaning. Hence, 'if you will write' is incorrect; it should be 'if you write'.

× There is a quite that if you will write down our problem in a paper, half of our problem will be resolved.

✓ There is a quote that if you write down your problem on a paper, half of your problem will be resolved.

Using 'our' implies shared problems, but the sentence is a general statement, so 'your' is more appropriate to address the listener or reader.

× There is a quite that if you will write down our problem in a paper, half of our problem will be resolved.

✓ There is a quote that if you write down your problem on a paper, half of your problem will be resolved.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'paper'; the correct preposition is 'on' because we write on paper.

× That's what I use it to follow in my life also.

✓ That's what I use to follow in my life also.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here because 'use' already takes a direct object; adding 'it' causes redundancy and grammatical error.

× I prefer typing rather than the handwriting because while we are typing if any mistake when we can correct it and we can save in our application, but in the writing we need to carry that particular paper or book with us itself.

✓ I prefer typing rather than handwriting because while typing, if there is any mistake, we can correct it and save it in our application, but with writing, we need to carry that particular paper or book with us.

'The handwriting' is incorrect; 'handwriting' without 'the' is correct here. 'While we are typing if any mistake when we can correct it' is ungrammatical; it should be 'while typing, if there is any mistake, we can correct it'. 'Save in our application' needs 'save it in our application'. 'In the writing' should be 'with writing'. 'With us itself' is redundant; 'with us' suffices.