Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I write a lot. Mostly, I write essays and papers for my school assignments. Besides that, I also write for fun sometimes.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和句子不完整的问题，建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并补充完整的理由和细节。

例: I enjoy writing journals and short stories. For example, keeping a journal helps me record daily events, which become fond memories when I look back. Writing short stories is also a good way to relieve stress.

提案: 回答表达不清晰且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

例: Yes, I think my writing habits will change over time. I will probably write more journals than short stories because I will have more responsibilities and less free time.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，建议避免重复，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并补充具体原因。

例: I prefer handwriting because it gives me a direct sense of comfort and relief. When I type on my computer, it feels more like work or writing an essay.

× Yes, I write for too many purpose, one is to finish my tasks with our teacher assigned.

✓ Yes, I write for too many purposes, one is to finish my tasks assigned by our teacher.

purpose是可数名词，表示“目的”，应使用复数形式purposes。

× They are usually papers and essays but one but the other would just for fun or just.

✓ They are usually papers and essays, but some are just for fun.

句子中表达“有些是为了娱乐”，应使用复数形式some，且句子结构不完整，需调整。

× I enjoy writing journals and short stories for example, keeping a journal can make me record what happened today today, which serves as a fond memory as I look back and writing short stories is a good way to relieve.

✓ I enjoy writing journals and short stories. For example, keeping a journal helps me record what happened today, which serves as a fond memory when I look back, and writing short stories is a good way to relieve stress.

句子结构混乱，缺少连接词，且“relieve”后应有宾语如“stress”。

× Yes, I think maybe with time passing by I would keep more journals than short stories because it is because there may be more time burdens and responsibilities on my show.

✓ Yes, I think maybe with time passing by I would keep more journals than short stories because there may be more time burdens and responsibilities on my shoulders.

“show”应为“shoulders”，表示“肩膀”，是拼写错误。

× I prefer handwriting handwriting because it bring me a direct sense of comfort and relief.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it brings me a direct sense of comfort and relief.

动词bring应与主语it保持第三人称单数形式，改为brings。

× When I walk on my computer. I feel I was just writing an essay or finishing work.

✓ When I work on my computer, I feel like I am just writing an essay or finishing work.

walk应为work，且句子时态和表达不当，需调整为现在进行时。