Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "I prefer" twice and correct small mistakes such as "it's to be" should be "it is" or "it's". Also, make your answer more natural by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't write a lot because I find it time-consuming and challenging; therefore, I prefer texting and typing instead.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has some redundancy. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating similar phrases like "in a paper" twice. Also, explain why you prefer writing in your journal to enrich your answer.

例: I like to write in my journal because it helps me organize my thoughts and reflect on my day. Writing my ideas on paper makes me feel more connected to them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, explain how your writing changes to provide specific supporting details.

例: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time because as I practice more, I improve my skills and express my ideas more clearly.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has some repetition and minor grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "I prefer" and correct sentence structure for better fluency. Use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly.

例: To be honest, I prefer typing these days because it is more convenient and faster; moreover, I can easily correct mistakes while typing.

× No, I don't write a lot because I find it's to be time consuming and challenging and so I prefer I prefer texting and typing and other.

✓ No, I don't write a lot because I find it time-consuming and challenging, so I prefer texting, typing, and other methods.

The phrase 'to be time consuming' is incorrect here; the correct form is the adjective 'time-consuming' to describe the activity. Also, 'I prefer I prefer' is a repetition error. Additionally, 'and other' is incomplete and should be 'and other methods' or similar for clarity.

× Well, if I want to write, I prefer writing in my journal and then my thoughts in a paper and put it on a paper, so. That's it.

✓ Well, if I want to write, I prefer writing in my journal and then putting my thoughts on paper. That's it.

The phrase 'put it on a paper' is awkward; the correct expression is 'putting my thoughts on paper.' Also, the sentence structure is improved by combining related ideas and removing unnecessary words.

× Yes, sure. When I I'm writing in a while, my writing will change and I progress so. Writing and composing it like another things can be changed.

✓ Yes, sure. When I write for a while, my writing changes and I progress. Writing and composing other things can also change.

The phrase 'When I I'm writing in a while' is incorrect; it should be 'When I write for a while.' Also, 'my writing will change' is better expressed in present tense 'my writing changes' to indicate habitual action. 'Writing and composing it like another things can be changed' is awkward and corrected to 'Writing and composing other things can also change.'

× To be honest, I prefer typing these days because I think it's more convenient and faster and when I when I'm typing can I can correct it in a while, so I prefer.

✓ To be honest, I prefer typing these days because I think it's more convenient and faster, and when I'm typing, I can correct it quickly, so I prefer it.

The phrase 'when I when I'm typing can I can correct it in a while' is ungrammatical and confusing. It is corrected to 'when I'm typing, I can correct it quickly.' Also, 'so I prefer' is incomplete and should be 'so I prefer it.'