Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了写作的目的，但语言不够自然，且有语法错误，如“keep writing direct”应为“keep writing directly”或“write regularly”。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I write regularly every day to reflect on my experiences and improve my writing skills because I aspire to become an official reporter for a foreign media outlet.

提案: 回答简洁但略显简单，建议增加连接词使句子更连贯，并丰富细节，比如说明写作如何帮助释放压力。

例: I like to write notes about my mood and daily experiences because it helps me release stress and organize my thoughts more clearly.

提案: 回答中有重复和不连贯的表达，建议使用更清晰的结构和连接词，避免口语化的填充词，表达观点时更具体。

例: I don't think the way I write will change soon because although many people use apps to record important information, I prefer handwriting as a way to relieve stress.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够清晰。建议去除多余词汇，使用正确语法，并具体说明喜欢手写的原因。

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because writing things down helps me organize my thoughts and better understand the knowledge I am learning.

× Yes, I keep writing direct every day in order to reflect on my experiences and practice my writing skills, which is something I foster consciously because I want to be an official reporter in a foreign media outlet.

✓ Yes, I keep writing directly every day in order to reflect on my experiences and practice my writing skills, which is something I foster consciously because I want to be an official reporter in a foreign media outlet.

这里“direct”是副词，应该用副词形式“directly”，而不是形容词“direct”。动词后面修饰方式应使用副词。

× Just some notes to record my mood and my experiences in the day because it's a good way to release stress.

✓ Just some notes to record my mood and my experiences during the day because it's a good way to release stress.

“in the day”表达不自然，应该用“during the day”表示“在一天中”。这里是介词短语的正确用法问题。

× You know, recently people use varieties of apps to write down important things, so writing in hand is just a good way to relieve stress.

✓ You know, recently people use various apps to write down important things, so handwriting is just a good way to relieve stress.

“varieties of apps”用法不当，应该用“various apps”表示“各种各样的应用”。另外，“writing in hand”表达不自然，应该用“handwriting”表示“手写”。

× That is the thing. So that won't change in a long term.

✓ That is the thing. So that won't change in the long term.

“in a long term”中冠词使用错误，应该用固定搭配“in the long term”表示“从长远来看”。

× I'm a pen person because only writing things down can make me tidy my thoughts and can make me feel knowledge indeed, uh, come into my mind.

✓ I'm a pen person because only writing things down can help me tidy my thoughts and can make me feel knowledge indeed, uh, come into my mind.

“make me tidy my thoughts”表达不正确，应该用“help me tidy my thoughts”表示“帮助我理清思路”。“make me feel knowledge come into my mind”表达不自然，建议保持原意但语法上先改正。