Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более точные формулировки, а также избегать лишних слов.

例: Yes, I write a lot as part of my job because I work as a teacher. I often write notes in journals and copybooks to prepare lessons.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и неясные фразы. Следует использовать правильные слова и грамматику, а также структурировать ответ с использованием связующих слов.

例: I like to write essays and keep a diary about my daily routine because it helps me reflect on my day. Also, I enjoy writing about insights I gain from reading books.

提案: Ответ понятен, но можно улучшить связность и грамматику. Используйте связующие слова и правильные времена для более естественного звучания.

例: Yes, my writing has changed over time. For example, when I was a child, I loved writing poetry, but now I prefer writing diaries and memories.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и грамматические ошибки. Рекомендуется использовать разнообразные выражения и правильные формы глаголов.

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me think better. Typing is difficult for me since I type slowly, so I find handwriting more comfortable.

× I working as a teacher, so of course that's part of my work.

✓ I am working as a teacher, so of course that's part of my work.

The verb 'working' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Without 'am', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I write and buy pen on journals and copy books and.

✓ I write and buy pens, journals, and copy books.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used here. Also, 'pen' should be plural 'pens' to match the context. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper preposition use.

× I very adore writing and in childhood I drink.

✓ I really adore writing and in childhood I did.

The adverb 'very' is incorrectly used with 'adore'; 'really' is more appropriate. Also, 'I drink' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'I did' to refer to past action. The sentence is corrected for proper adverb use and past tense.

× at my childhood I adored writing poetry, but uh, now I like writing Diaries and memories.

✓ In my childhood, I adored writing poetry, but now I like writing diaries and memories.

The phrase 'at my childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'in my childhood'. Also, 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition and capitalization.

× I prefer handwriting because it gives to my brain more work and typing is difficult for me.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it gives my brain more work and typing is difficult for me.

The preposition 'to' after 'gives' is unnecessary and incorrect. The verb 'give' is transitive and does not require 'to' in this context.

× I typing so slowly and it is a problem for me typing.

✓ I type very slowly and it is a problem for me to type.

The verb 'typing' is incorrectly used without auxiliary verbs. It should be 'I type' in simple present tense, and 'for me to type' to express the problem. The sentence is corrected for proper verb tense and structure.