Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，表达不清晰且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，明确表达观点。

例: I don't write much on paper because I usually use my phone to record daily events and share pictures on social media.

提案: 回答结构混乱，语法错误较多，内容不具体。建议先明确主题句，再用具体例子支持，并注意语法正确。

例: I like to write down unique ideas that come to my mind, especially funny thoughts, because they inspire me.

提案: 回答不连贯，语法错误严重，表达不完整。建议先给出明确观点，再用原因或例子支持，注意句子完整。

例: Yes, what I write changes over time because as I grow, my ideas and thoughts develop.

提案: 回答重复且未完成，语法错误多。建议简洁表达偏好，并说明原因，确保句子完整。

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember my ideas better than typing on my phone.

× I think I seldom write something on paper because now we are used to using phone to record our daily lives and we will post some pictures on the social media so that I will ignore too.

✓ I think I seldom write anything on paper because now we are used to using phones to record our daily lives and we post some pictures on social media, so I ignore it too.

这里'something'用于否定句不合适，应该用'anything'。'phone'应为复数'phones'，因为指的是一般的手机。'the social media'中'the'不需要，'social media'是不可数名词。

× I am in to record some ideas in my mind is specially for some unique thinking.

✓ I am into recording some ideas in my mind, especially some unique thoughts.

短语应为'be into doing something'，所以用'recording'。'specially'应为'adverb'，但这里用'expecially'更合适。'thinking'应改为复数形式'thoughts'。

× For example, I always have many insights of humor related.

✓ For example, I always have many insights related to humor.

'insights'是复数，后面应用复数形式或复数搭配。'humor related'结构不完整，应改为'related to humor'。

× To have an earlier it must have changed up go through with the time because I am growing up now and every different time I will have different ideas and thinking to write down so it's.

✓ Earlier, it must have changed over time because I am growing up now, and at different times I have different ideas and thoughts to write down.

原句结构混乱，语序错误。'changed up go through with the time'不合语法，应改为'changed over time'。'every different time'应为'at different times'。'thinking'应改为复数'thoughts'。

× To be honest, I prefer to write to write down my ideas and thinking rather than type it on the phone because on when I am writing something on the paper, I will memorize it very well and if I just tax it on my phone, I really.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to write down my ideas and thoughts rather than type them on the phone because when I am writing something on paper, I memorize it very well, but if I just text it on my phone, I don't.

'write to write down'重复，应删去一个'write'。'thinking'应为复数'thoughts'。'type it'中的'it'应改为'them'，与复数'ideas and thoughts'一致。'on the paper'中'the'不需要。'tax'应为'text'。句尾不完整，补充完整。