Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, start with 'Yes, I write a lot because I like to organise my day.' Then explain why, using simple and clear sentences.

例: Yes, I write a lot because I like to organise my day. Every morning, I make a note of my tasks to stay focused. Also, I write down my homework to remember it easily. Writing helps me improve my English skills, which I enjoy very much.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on answering the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons. Avoid mixing unrelated ideas in one sentence.

例: I like to write in English because it is my favourite subject. Writing in English helps me concentrate and improve my skills. I also enjoy writing about mathematics because I like solving problems. Writing about these subjects helps me learn better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to answer the question directly with a simple topic sentence, then explain your opinion with clear reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I don't think the things I write will change because I always complete my daily tasks. If I don't finish them, I feel unfocused. Therefore, I try to stick to my plan to feel confident and organised.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is not clearly expressed. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference. Then explain why, using linking words and specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

例: I prefer typing because it helps me improve my language skills. Also, when I have a computer, I can type faster and do my work more efficiently. Typing allows me to write more and practise my skills better than handwriting.

× Yes, I write to so many things because I like to schedule my day.

✓ Yes, I write about so many things because I like to schedule my day.

The verb 'write' is usually followed by the preposition 'about' when referring to topics. Using 'to' here is incorrect preposition usage (Problem Type 11). Correct preposition improves sentence clarity.

× So when I wake up at the morning, I'll make a note of my day.

✓ So when I wake up in the morning, I'll make a note of my day.

The correct preposition to use with 'morning' is 'in' not 'at'. 'At the morning' is incorrect (Problem Type 11). Using 'in the morning' is the standard expression.

× And also I had homework, so I have a thing that if I write so I can remember it easily.

✓ And also I have homework, so I have a habit that if I write, I can remember it easily.

The sentence mixes past tense 'had' with present context. Since homework is ongoing, present tense 'have' is appropriate (Problem Type 5). Also, 'thing' is vague; 'habit' fits better here.

× So I write a lot and I love to do it because I write English in the image.

✓ So I write a lot and I love to do it because I write English in my notebook.

The phrase 'write English in the image' is unclear and likely incorrect. It seems the student meant to say where they write English. Correcting to 'in my notebook' clarifies meaning (Problem Type 26).

× So let's look. I enjoyed.

✓ So let's look. I enjoyed it.

The sentence 'I enjoyed' is incomplete without an object. Adding 'it' completes the sentence (Problem Type 23).

× I like to ride my time it takes and English because English is my favorite subject and also whenever I write English I feel I become more and more focus to render genius because English is not that easy but I can do it easily so I just like it an mathematic.

✓ I like to write during my free time and English because English is my favorite subject. Also, whenever I write English, I feel I become more and more focused and intelligent because English is not that easy, but I can do it easily, so I just like it and mathematics.

Multiple issues: 'ride' should be 'write' (typo), 'focus' should be 'focused' (adjective form), 'render genius' is incorrect phrase, replaced with 'intelligent'. 'an mathematic' should be 'and mathematics'. Pronouns and word choices corrected for clarity and grammar (Problem Types 12, 13, 26).

× I like to solve the problems that were I like to write.

✓ I like to solve the problems that I like to write about.

The phrase 'that were I like to write' is incorrect. Corrected to 'that I like to write about' to make grammatical sense (Problem Type 5).

× I didn't think about it because I write my ALDI task, so I completed them because if I didn't complete my any of stars so I feel unfocused.

✓ I haven't thought about it because I write my ALDI tasks, and I complete them. If I don't complete any of my tasks, I feel unfocused.

Mixed tenses and incorrect plural forms. 'Didn't think' changed to 'haven't thought' for present relevance. 'ALDI task' pluralized to 'tasks'. Sentence restructured for clarity (Problem Type 5).

× So I don't think that I change any tasks of my day.

✓ So I don't think that I will change any tasks of my day.

The sentence is about future possibility, so modal verb 'will' is needed. Also, 'change any tasks' is better with 'will change' to indicate future (Problem Type 4).

× So what? What can I write that I complete because I feel confident if I finish my.

✓ So what can I write that I can complete? Because I feel confident if I finish my tasks.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructed to form two clear sentences with proper structure (Problem Type 26).

× I prefer typing because typing helps me to improve my language skills and also that haves me to type more for like if I had a computer so I can do things better and also I can type more and more and also on money so typing skills is better when I am writing.

✓ I prefer typing because typing helps me improve my language skills and also allows me to type more. If I had a computer, I could do things better and type more. Also, typing skills are better when I am writing.

Incorrect modal verb usage and verb forms: 'haves me' corrected to 'allows me', 'if I had' followed by 'could' for conditional. Sentence restructured for clarity and grammar (Problem Type 4).