Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In your answer, try to be more natural and clear by using complete sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'I often write an essay three times a week,' you can say 'Yes, I usually write essays about three times a week to practice my English skills.' This makes your answer more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I usually write essays about three times a week to practice my English skills and improve my writing.

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Avoid unnecessary words like 'Anne' and try to connect your ideas logically. For example, you can say, 'I like to write about myself because it helps me reflect on my personality and understand myself better.' This is more natural and effective.

例: I like to write about myself because it helps me reflect on my personality and understand myself better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words. For example, 'Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain more knowledge and experience. This helps me improve and correct my mistakes easily.'

例: Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain more knowledge and experience, which helps me improve and correct my mistakes easily.

提案: Your answer is too long and has some unclear parts. Try to organize your ideas with linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, 'I prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary. Also, writing by hand allows me to reflect on my daily activities and understand myself better. Moreover, I can easily correct my mistakes.'

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary. Also, writing by hand allows me to reflect on my daily activities and understand myself better. Moreover, I can easily correct my mistakes.

× I often write an essay three times a week.

✓ I often write essays three times a week.

The word 'essay' should be plural 'essays' because the frequency 'three times a week' implies multiple essays, not just one.

× I like to write about myself that is related to my personality.

✓ I like to write about myself, which is related to my personality.

The relative pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used for a person or self-reference; 'which' is appropriate here to refer to the clause about writing about oneself.

× I write it because it can reflect on my personality.

✓ I write about myself because it reflects my personality.

The sentence is awkward; 'write it' is unclear. Changing to 'write about myself' clarifies the object, and 'reflects' agrees with singular subject 'it'.

× Anne. I can understand myself more clearly.

✓ Then, I can understand myself more clearly.

The word 'Anne' seems to be a typo or misplaced; replacing it with 'Then' connects the ideas logically.

× Yes, I believe the saying I have right would be changed as I get the knowledge and experiences I my writing have been improved and I can correct it easily.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write would change as I gain knowledge and experience; my writing will improve and I can correct it easily.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and awkward phrasing. 'The saying I have right' is unclear; 'the things I write' fits better. Also, 'get the knowledge and experiences' should be 'gain knowledge and experience' for natural expression.

× Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I am writing because it can allow me to improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I write because it allows me to improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary.

The phrase 'when I am writing' is correct but 'when I write' is more natural here. Also, 'it can allow me' is better as 'it allows me' for clarity and correctness.

× Additionally, I can. Write about myself which? Reflect on my daily activity an I can understand myself more clearly.

✓ Additionally, I can write about myself, which reflects on my daily activities, and I can understand myself more clearly.

The original sentence has punctuation errors and unclear phrasing. Correcting punctuation and connecting clauses properly improves clarity.

× Not only I can correct my mistake easily.

✓ Not only can I correct my mistakes easily.

The phrase 'Not only I can' is incorrect word order; it should be 'Not only can I'. Also, 'mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' to indicate multiple errors.