Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more organized. Start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid unclear phrases and focus on correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I write essays about twice a week because it helps me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary. Writing regularly is very important for me to express my ideas clearly and develop my language abilities.

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons clearly. Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: I like to write about my habits and personality because it helps me reflect on my daily experiences and emotions. This practice allows me to understand myself better and improve my ideas.

提案: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe my writing changes as I gain more knowledge and experience. For example, when I was a child, my writing was poor, but now I have improved it by using effective techniques.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear examples. Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary to make your answer natural.

例: I definitely prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my writing skills and learn new vocabulary. For example, I often write paragraphs about my daily activities, which helps me reflect and understand myself better.

× Guess I often write an essay twice a week.

✓ I guess I often write an essay twice a week.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before the verb 'guess'. Adding 'I' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× I like writing because it can help me to improve my writing skills and learn new work actually which I find out it is very important for me too.

✓ I like writing because it can help me improve my writing skills and learn new things, which I find very important for me too.

The phrase 'help me to improve' is better as 'help me improve' for natural English. 'Learn new work actually' is incorrect; 'learn new things' is appropriate. 'Find out it is' is incorrect; 'find it' is correct.

× Start right by my own self and no more clearly about the idea of writing.

✓ I start writing on my own and am becoming clearer about the idea of writing.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it with a subject and verb clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I like to write about my habit and my personality every day.

✓ I like to write about my habits and my personality every day.

The word 'habit' should be plural 'habits' to correctly refer to multiple habits.

× For example, writing about myself that is related to my personality, that it can reflect on my daily experience, an emotion which allows me to understand myself more clearly an improve my idea to be better.

✓ For example, writing about myself, which is related to my personality, can reflect my daily experiences and emotions, allowing me to understand myself more clearly and improve my ideas.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. Breaking it into a clearer structure with proper clauses improves readability and grammar.

× As I believe the saying I would drive have been trying as I get many knowledge and experiences.

✓ As I believe the saying, I have been trying as I gain much knowledge and experience.

The original sentence misuses verb forms and articles. 'Would drive have been trying' is incorrect; 'have been trying' is correct. 'Get many knowledge' should be 'gain much knowledge'.

× I have been improved my writing an it's easy an correctly for me to do it.

✓ I have improved my writing, and it's easy and correct for me to do it.

'Have been improved' is incorrect; the present perfect 'have improved' is correct. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Correctly' should be 'correct' to match the adjective form.

× For example, as a child my writing is at the bottom but currently I can improve it by using some technique that is very effective for me to start it.

✓ For example, as a child, my writing was poor, but currently, I can improve it by using some techniques that are very effective for me to start.

The sentence needs commas for clarity. 'Is at the bottom' is informal; 'was poor' is better. 'Technique' should be plural 'techniques'.

× Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I am writing because it can allow me to improve my writing skill an.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I am writing because it allows me to improve my writing skills.

'Can allow me' is awkward; 'allows me' is more natural. 'Skill an' is incomplete; it should be 'skills'.

× For example, in my life Showtime I always write a paragraph about myself which I find out I can reflect on my daily activity an understand myself clearly.

✓ For example, in my free time, I always write a paragraph about myself, which I find helps me reflect on my daily activities and understand myself clearly.

'Life Showtime' is incorrect; 'free time' is appropriate. 'Find out I can reflect' is awkward; 'find helps me reflect' is better. 'Activity an' should be 'activities and'.