Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Use proper sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences. For example, you can say: "Yes, I love writing and I write an essay every day because it helps me improve my skills and learn new vocabulary, even though it can be challenging."

例: Yes, I love writing and I write an essay every day because it helps me improve my skills and learn new vocabulary, even though it can be challenging.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you write and why. For example, say: "I enjoy writing short stories and journals about my personality and habits because it helps me reflect on my daily experiences and emotions."

例: I enjoy writing short stories and journals about my personality and habits because it helps me reflect on my daily experiences and emotions.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly. For example: "Yes, I believe my writing will change as I gain more knowledge and experience. For instance, when I was younger, my writing was poor, but now I try to express my thoughts clearly and plan my writing properly."

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I gain more knowledge and experience. For instance, when I was younger, my writing was poor, but now I try to express my thoughts clearly and plan my writing properly.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example: "I prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my skills and remember keywords. Also, I can learn new words and correct mistakes easily when I write by hand."

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my skills and remember keywords. Also, I can learn new words and correct mistakes easily when I write by hand.

× Yes, I definitely love writing so much I write an essay everyday because it can help me to improve my writing skills and I can learn new vocabulary even though it is take time and challenging but I will try all my best at least I can write one essay in a day which is.

✓ Yes, I definitely love writing so much. I write an essay every day because it can help me improve my writing skills and I can learn new vocabulary even though it takes time and is challenging, but I will try my best. At least I can write one essay in a day.

The phrase 'it is take time' is incorrect; the verb 'take' should be in the third person singular present tense 'takes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the sentence is run-on and needs punctuation to separate ideas clearly. 'Everyday' should be 'every day' as the adverbial phrase meaning 'each day'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms and proper punctuation to improve clarity.

× I enjoy writing about my personality an habit into a short story writing journal allow me to reflect on my daily experience, an emotion which helped me understand myself better.

✓ I enjoy writing about my personality and habits in a short story writing journal that allows me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions, which help me understand myself better.

The sentence has incorrect conjunctions ('an' instead of 'and'), singular/plural mismatches ('habit' should be 'habits', 'experience' should be 'experiences', 'emotion' should be 'emotions'), and missing relative pronouns ('allow' should be 'allows' and connected properly). Suggestions: use correct conjunctions, plural forms where appropriate, and proper sentence structure with relative clauses.

× On the other hand, writing their story lets me explore my gratuity and with activities that make me process an enjoyable in that way.

✓ On the other hand, writing their story lets me explore my gratitude through activities that make the process enjoyable in that way.

The phrase 'explore my gratuity and with activities' is incorrect; 'gratuity' should be 'gratitude', and 'and with activities' is an incorrect prepositional phrase. Also, 'make me process an enjoyable' is incorrect; it should be 'make the process enjoyable'. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary and prepositions to convey meaning clearly.

× Yes, I believe the thing I write would change over time as I get more knowledge and experience.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write would change over time as I gain more knowledge and experience.

The word 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple writings. Also, 'get' is better replaced with 'gain' when referring to knowledge and experience. Suggestions: ensure subject and object number agreement and use appropriate verbs.

× Is my writing style an idea have been improved?

✓ My writing style and ideas have improved.

The original sentence is a question but is ungrammatical and confusing. It should be a statement indicating improvement. Suggestions: use clear sentence structure and correct verb forms.

× For example when I was younger my rating was at the bottom but now I try to express my thought more clearly an I have a plan outline properly.

✓ For example, when I was younger, my writing was poor, but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly and I have a proper plan outline.

'Rating' is incorrect in this context; 'writing' fits better. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Plan outline properly' should be 'proper plan outline'. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary and conjunctions, and plural forms where needed.

× Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I am writing because it can help me to improve my writing skill an get the keyword easily so I don't I don't have two forgot it.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer handwriting when I am writing because it can help me improve my writing skills and get the keywords easily so I don't forget them.

'An' should be 'and'. 'Two forgot' is incorrect; it should be 'to forget'. 'Keyword' should be plural 'keywords' to match context. Also, 'I don't I don't' is repetitive. Suggestions: use correct conjunctions, infinitive forms, and plural nouns.

× For example, when I am writing an essay, I can know the new world and I can correct my mistake easily.

✓ For example, when I am writing an essay, I can learn new words and correct my mistakes easily.

'Know the new world' is incorrect; it should be 'learn new words'. 'Mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' to match context. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary and plural forms.