Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Try to combine ideas smoothly and use linking words for coherence. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I write quite often, especially when preparing for exams, as it helps me remember important methods. Additionally, I keep a daily journal to track my routine and thoughts.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid repeating words and try to use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, correct grammatical errors and be specific about your reasons.

例: I usually like to write about my daily routine in the morning so that I can remember my schedule. This helps me stay organized throughout the day.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using clearer linking words. Also, try to use more appropriate vocabulary and correct grammar mistakes to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time as I gain more knowledge and experience. For example, when I was younger, I mostly wrote simple stories, but now I prefer more complex and thoughtful pieces.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and better vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and express your preference clearly.

例: I prefer handwriting over typing because I write faster by hand. Also, writing by hand helps me improve my writing skills.

× Similarly. I write journal daily in my daily routine.

✓ Similarly, I write a journal daily as part of my daily routine.

The sentence incorrectly uses a period after 'Similarly' and misses the article 'a' before 'journal'. Also, 'in my daily routine' is better expressed as 'as part of my daily routine' to indicate habitual action.

× I most of the time I like to write about my daily routine like I have to follow in my whole day.

✓ Most of the time, I like to write about my daily routine that I have to follow throughout the day.

The original sentence has redundant and awkward phrasing. 'I most of the time I like' is incorrect; it should be 'Most of the time, I like'. Also, 'like I have to follow in my whole day' is better expressed as 'that I have to follow throughout the day' for clarity.

× I usually write that in the morning time so that I can remember what to do on a what time.

✓ I usually write that in the morning so that I can remember what to do at what time.

The phrase 'on a what time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to specific times. Also, 'morning time' is better simplified to 'morning'.

× So I basically basically write it to be to be become a organized person.

✓ So I basically write it to become an organized person.

The sentence has repeated words 'basically basically' and 'to be to be become' which are redundant and incorrect. Also, 'a organized' should be 'an organized' because 'organized' starts with a vowel sound.

× Yes, I believe the thing I write would change over time as I gain more knowledge and experience by writing by writing and the topic I choose to write about would naturally evolve.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time as I gain more knowledge and experience by writing, and the topics I choose to write about will naturally evolve.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here for future certainty; 'will' is appropriate. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match context, and 'topic' should be plural 'topics'. The phrase 'by writing by writing' is repeated and should be corrected.

× And for example when I was younger I mostly wrote simple stories, but nowadays I prefer more pro complex and truly pieces.

✓ For example, when I was younger, I mostly wrote simple stories, but nowadays I prefer more professional, complex, and true pieces.

The phrase 'more pro complex and truly pieces' is incorrect. 'Pro' should be 'professional', 'truly' should be 'true', and commas are needed to separate adjectives. Also, 'And for example' is better as 'For example'.

× When whenever I have to write something, I'm also had time prep for handwriting as compared to typing because my typing is not that much fast whereas my writing is very well as compared to typing.

✓ Whenever I have to write something, I also have time to prepare for handwriting as compared to typing because my typing is not very fast, whereas my handwriting is much better than typing.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'When whenever' is redundant; 'I'm also had time prep' is incorrect tense and structure; 'not that much fast' should be 'not very fast'; 'my writing is very well' should be 'my handwriting is much better'; and 'as compared to typing' is better expressed as 'than typing' for comparison.

× So I usually prefer to write with my hand and it will enhance my like skills of writing also I think.

✓ So I usually prefer to write by hand, and I think it will also enhance my writing skills.

The phrase 'write with my hand' is better expressed as 'write by hand'. 'Like skills of writing' is incorrect; it should be 'writing skills'. The sentence structure is improved by adding a comma and rearranging the clauses for clarity.