Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan ejaan, serta buat kalimat lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lengkap dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, jelaskan aplikasi yang digunakan dengan benar dan hubungkan ide dengan kata penghubung.

例: Yes, I write a lot because I enjoy journaling and writing articles. I use applications like Quora and Medium to share my knowledge and ideas with others.

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan mudah dipahami. Jelaskan alasan menulis dengan kalimat yang logis dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide.

例: I especially like to write about my life story because writing helps me relieve stress and better understand my experiences.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur. Jelaskan alasan perubahan tulisan dengan kalimat yang koheren dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan sebab-akibat.

例: Of course, my writing changes because it reflects my experiences. As I gain more knowledge and experience, my thoughts and ideas evolve, so I update my writing accordingly.

提案: Perbaiki kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan jelaskan alasan preferensi dengan cara yang terstruktur dan mudah dipahami.

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me relax and enjoy my time. Writing in journals makes me feel peaceful and allows me to express my thoughts more deeply.

× I love for writing anything like a journaling or. Articol and others.

✓ I love writing anything like journaling or articles and others.

The phrase 'love for writing' is incorrect; 'love writing' is the correct form. Also, 'a journaling' should be 'journaling' (uncountable noun) and 'Articol' is misspelled and should be 'articles'.

× I have a. Application name Quora and I like to share my knowledge in Kwara.

✓ I have an application named Quora and I like to share my knowledge on Quora.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Application name' should be 'application named'. The preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'on' is used for platforms like Quora. Also, 'Kwara' is a misspelling of 'Quora'.

× I also met and Medium.

✓ I also use Medium.

The phrase 'I also met and Medium' is unclear and incorrect. It likely means 'I also use Medium', which is a platform for writing. 'Met' is the past tense of 'meet' and does not fit here.

× It's a application for making a writing idea.

✓ It's an application for generating writing ideas.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. The phrase 'making a writing idea' is awkward; 'generating writing ideas' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× because when I should not have my writing I feel like I will get come and can believe real life my stressful.

✓ because when I don't have my writing, I feel like I will become stressed and can't believe real life is stressful.

The modal verb 'should not have' is incorrectly used; it should be 'don't have'. The phrase 'get come and can believe' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'become stressed and can't believe'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× That's why I literally like right a lot.

✓ That's why I literally like writing a lot.

The verb 'right' is incorrect; it should be 'write'. After 'like', the verb should be in the '-ing' form: 'writing'.

× because it's based on my experience in that yours an after I getting more experience and knowing or knowledge, I know that sometimes I need to change my right and of course my brain in my mind also will difference than before.

✓ because it's based on my experience in the years, and after I get more experience and knowledge, I know that sometimes I need to change my writing, and of course my brain and mind will be different than before.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'in that yours an' is unclear and corrected to 'in the years'; 'after I getting' should be 'after I get'; 'knowing or knowledge' simplified to 'knowledge'; 'change my right' corrected to 'change my writing'; 'my brain in my mind also will difference' corrected to 'my brain and mind will be different'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I prefer handwriting that's why I have a lot of journal books because beside I think and do life my stress writing in handwriting also can.

✓ I prefer handwriting; that's why I have a lot of journal books because besides, I think and deal with my life stress, writing by hand also can.

The sentence is fragmented and has incorrect prepositions: 'beside' should be 'besides'; 'do life my stress' is unclear and corrected to 'deal with my life stress'; 'writing in handwriting' is better as 'writing by hand'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Make me so peaceful an enjoy my time and when I'm writing, I feel like I I really I.

✓ It makes me feel peaceful and enjoy my time, and when I'm writing, I feel like I really am myself.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Make me so peaceful an enjoy my time' corrected to 'It makes me feel peaceful and enjoy my time'. The phrase 'I feel like I I really I' is corrected to 'I feel like I really am myself' for clarity and grammatical correctness.