Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构的完整性，避免重复和多余的词汇。

例: Yes, I write a lot. I started writing stories when I was young, especially during middle school. Now, as a journalist, writing is my daily job, so I write extensively.

提案: 回答不连贯且表达不清晰，建议使用完整句子并且明确表达写作内容和原因，同时使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: When I was at school, I liked writing about people, such as my family members like my father and grandmother. Now, as a journalist, I write stories about public policy, the environment, and concerts because these topics interest me.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多且表达不清晰，建议理清思路，使用正确的时态和句子结构，明确说明写作内容的变化及原因。

例: Yes, as a journalist, the topics I write about change over time. For example, I now focus more on public safety, environmental concerns, and health-related news because these issues are constantly evolving.

提案: 回答中存在拼写和语法错误，建议注意单词拼写和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯，明确比较两种写作方式的优缺点。

例: I prefer handwriting when I write in my diary because it feels more personal and comfortable. However, I usually type on my laptop for work tasks because typing is faster and more convenient. For example, typing helps me improve my work efficiency and saves time.

× I began to a then right when I was young then.

✓ I began to write when I was young.

句子中使用了错误的动词形式“to a then right”，应为“to write”，表示开始做某事。这里需要使用动词不定式to write来表达“开始写作”。

× I write stories when I was in middle school.

✓ I wrote stories when I was in middle school.

描述过去的动作时，动词应使用过去式。这里“write”应改为过去式“wrote”，因为动作发生在过去。

× Now I'm journalist.

✓ Now I'm a journalist.

职业名称前通常需要冠词“a”或“an”，这里缺少冠词，应为“a journalist”。

× Well, when I was at school.

✓ Well, when I was in school.

表示在学校期间，正确的介词是“in”，而不是“at”。

× I like to write people.

✓ I like to write about people.

动词“write”后面需要加介词“about”来表示写作的对象，缺少介词导致句意不完整。

× Like my family. My father, my Gran manner.

✓ Like my family, my father, my grandmother.

“Gran manner”拼写错误，应为“grandmother”，且应合并为一句完整表达。

× Then I'm a journalist, I right.

✓ Then I'm a journalist, I write.

“right”拼写错误，应为“write”，表示写作。

× I suppose everything is different so.

✓ I suppose everything is different now.

句子末尾“so”用法不当，应改为“now”表示当前状态。

× Is always changed or the I right?

✓ It is always changing, isn't it?

句子结构混乱，缺少主语，时态和语序错误。应使用现在进行时“is always changing”，并用反意疑问句“isn't it?”。

× I prefer handwriting when I write a diary because it felt more personal and comfortable.

✓ I prefer handwriting when I write a diary because it feels more personal and comfortable.

时态不一致，主句用现在时，原因状语从句也应使用现在时“feels”。

× However, I only type on top laptop for underwriting tasks becauses fast and more convenient.

✓ However, I only type on my laptop for writing tasks because it is fast and more convenient.

“on top laptop”错误，应为“on my laptop”；“underwriting”拼写错误，应为“writing”；“becauses”拼写错误，应为“because”；缺少主语“it is”。

× For example, typing helps me add to my work eiseni and saves time.

✓ For example, typing helps me add to my work efficiency and saves time.

“eiseni”拼写错误，应为“efficiency”，表示效率。