Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议回答时先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明写作的频率和目的，避免重复和不相关内容。

例: Yes, I write quite often because I want to improve my Indonesian writing skills. I usually practice by writing articles and keeping a daily diary.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，表达混乱，缺乏逻辑。建议先明确说明喜欢写什么，然后用具体例子支持，并使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I like to write simple notes because they help me remember important things. For example, I record important events and daily weather. Writing regularly also helps me express myself more clearly.

提案: 回答语句不通顺，内容不明确。建议直接回答问题，说明写作内容如何随着时间和经验改变，并用具体例子说明。

例: Yes, I think what I write changes over time. When I was younger, I wrote simple stories, but after reading many books, my writing has become deeper and more family-oriented.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议先直接表达偏好，再用具体理由支持，注意句子连贯和词汇准确。

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typing is faster and more convenient. For example, it helps me organize my thoughts clearly and makes editing easier compared to writing by hand.

× Yes, I write a wide open.

✓ Yes, I write a lot.

原句中“a wide open”结构不正确，表达不清晰。应使用常见表达“write a lot”表示“写很多”。建议使用固定搭配，避免生造短语。

× Because I want to improve my Indonesia. Writing skills.

✓ Because I want to improve my Indonesian writing skills.

“Indonesia”是国家名，形容词形式应为“Indonesian”。“Writing skills”不应分开成两句。建议将形容词和名词正确搭配，保持句子完整。

× Are you already in practice almost every day by writing articles and dairy?

✓ I am already practicing almost every day by writing articles and diary entries.

原句结构混乱，疑问句形式不符合语境，应为陈述句。单词“dairy”应为“diary”。建议理清句子结构，使用正确单词。

× I like to rather simple notes because it hurt me too.

✓ I like to write rather simple notes because it helps me too.

“like to rather simple notes”缺少动词，应为“like to write rather simple notes”。“hurt me”用词错误，应为“helps me”。建议注意动词使用和词义搭配。

× Recorder something important, for example, over right or they're re that'll record or the important events all the weather over the date.

✓ I record something important, for example, write or record important events and the weather over the date.

原句中“Recorder”用作动词不当，且句子结构混乱，代词“they're re”错误。建议使用正确动词形式和清晰表达。

× Reading regular also allow me to impress myself more clearly.

✓ Reading regularly also allows me to express myself more clearly.

“Reading regular”应为副词形式“Reading regularly”。“allow”主语是单数，应用“allows”。“impress myself”用词不当，应为“express myself”。建议注意副词形式和主谓一致。

× Yes, I single so I driver.

✓ Yes, I think so, I guess.

原句“single”与语境不符，应为“think”。“driver”无意义，应为“guess”或类似表达。建议使用正确词汇表达意思。

× Will it change it?

✓ Will it change?

重复使用“it”造成句子冗余，应去掉多余的代词。建议简化句子，避免重复。

× As I read it more fully, somewhere with a child I used to dread is the most stories about a family oriented you know since I experienced or not after reading many books.

✓ As I read more fully, some stories I used to dread, mostly about family-oriented topics, have changed since I experienced more or after reading many books.

原句结构混乱，语义不清。建议拆分句子，理清主谓宾关系，使用正确短语。

× My radio has become more deep.

✓ My reading has become deeper.

“radio”应为“reading”。“more deep”应为比较级“deeper”。建议使用正确词汇和比较级形式。

× I prefer typing rather underwriting because the tablet is much faster and more convenient for me, for example when I read regularly.

✓ I prefer typing rather than handwriting because the tablet is much faster and more convenient for me, for example when I read regularly.

“rather underwriting”应为“rather than handwriting”，介词使用错误。建议掌握固定搭配“rather than”。

× Typing help. Let me see what other term and organize my thoughts more clearly.

✓ Typing helps me see other terms and organize my thoughts more clearly.

“Typing help.”句子不完整，应为“Typing helps me”。“Let me see what other term”表达不清，应调整为“see other terms”。建议保持句子完整和逻辑清晰。

× Also, it's easier to edit under shell.

✓ Also, it's easier to edit on a tablet.

“under shell”无意义，应为“on a tablet”或类似表达。建议使用正确介词和词汇。

× Type the document of compared to handle red.

✓ Typing the document is easier compared to handwriting.

原句结构混乱，介词使用错误。应表达“Typing the document is easier compared to handwriting.”建议理清句子结构，正确使用介词。