Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use the present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons with linking words. For example, use 'I write a lot because it helps me improve my writing skills and expand my vocabulary.'

例: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me improve my writing skills and expand my vocabulary. Additionally, writing allows me to organize my thoughts more clearly, which benefits my overall communication.

提案: Focus on clarity and coherence by using linking words and correct grammar. Provide specific reasons and avoid vague phrases. For example, say 'I enjoy writing new stories because it challenges me to learn new vocabulary and improves my creativity.'

例: I enjoy writing new stories because it challenges me to learn new vocabulary and improves my creativity. For instance, I often research new words online to make my stories more interesting and accurate.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use correct sentence structures. Directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasons logically. For example, 'Yes, I believe my writing will change as I develop better skills and habits over time.'

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I develop better skills and habits over time. For example, I want to improve my style to make my writing easier to read and more engaging.

提案: Use consistent verb tenses and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Start with a clear preference or mention both with reasons. For example, 'I prefer typing because it is faster and boosts my confidence, but I also write by hand to improve my handwriting.'

例: I prefer typing because it allows me to write faster and feel more confident. However, I also write by hand sometimes to practice and improve my handwriting skills.

× Yes, of course I wrote a lot.

✓ Yes, of course I write a lot.

The question is in present tense 'Do you write a lot?', so the answer should also be in present tense. Using past tense 'wrote' is incorrect here.

× Because it helps me to improve my writing as well as vocabulary.

✓ It helps me to improve my writing as well as my vocabulary.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' without a main clause before it creates a sentence fragment. The sentence should be restructured to be complete.

× And also it is very effective to make my mind phrase.

✓ Also, it is very effective in helping me form my thoughts.

The phrase 'make my mind phrase' is unclear and incorrect. 'Make my mind phrase' is not a proper expression. It should be replaced with a clearer phrase like 'helping me form my thoughts'.

× Especially I like to write some new stories because it helps to improve my vocabulary by using some difficult words for the story and I researched for this stories many types of words from Internet and Google.

✓ Especially, I like to write new stories because it helps improve my vocabulary by using difficult words in the stories, and I research many types of words from the Internet and Google.

The use of 'some' is unnecessary here. Also, 'I researched for this stories' is incorrect; 'research' is usually used without 'for' and should be in present tense to match the context. 'Stories' should be plural and preceded by 'the' when referring to specific stories.

× It helps to me improve my selves and it is very good for history.

✓ It helps me improve myself and it is very good for history.

'Helps to me' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me'. 'My selves' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun is 'myself'.

× I think what I write would since I I want to since my easiest fasab writing styles, I want to make it off to a reading skill.

✓ I think what I write will change because I want to improve my writing style, and I want to develop my reading skills.

The sentence is unclear and contains many errors. 'Would since' is incorrect; 'will change' fits better. 'Fasab' is unclear and likely a typo. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct tense usage.

× And writing is kill from my habit.

✓ And writing is a skill I have developed from my habit.

'Writing is kill' is incorrect; it should be 'writing is a skill'. The phrase 'from my habit' is awkward; 'I have developed from my habit' is clearer.

× Sometime I used to typing on my laptop which helps to make me type fast and it helps to make me more confident and sometimes I used to write it on paper which helps to improve my handwriting also.

✓ Sometimes I type on my laptop, which helps me type faster and makes me more confident, and sometimes I write on paper, which also helps improve my handwriting.

'Used to typing' is incorrect; it should be 'type'. 'Helps to make me type fast' is awkward; 'helps me type faster' is better. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.