Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，且有无关内容。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免无意义的词汇，注意语法和句子结构。

例: Yes, I write a lot, especially essays for my economics class at school. I also practice writing outside of school to improve my skills.

提案: 表达不清晰，语法错误较多，句子不完整。建议用简单句表达喜欢写日记的原因，注意时态和句子完整性。

例: I like writing a diary because it helps me record my daily experiences and feelings. It is private and I can express myself freely.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，表达不够清晰。建议用更准确的词汇和句子表达观点，说明写作内容随时间和心情变化。

例: Yes, the things I write change because my feelings and opinions are different every day. As I grow older, my attitude towards the same events also changes.

提案: 表达较为清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意时态一致，使用正确的词汇，并简洁表达观点。

例: When I was young, I preferred handwriting because I could use different colored pens. Now, I prefer typing because it is more convenient and I can easily change colors on my laptop.

× Yes, of course, I always write a lot of essays in economics, which is a subject in. My school and when I learning outside need to practice writing.

✓ Yes, of course, I always write a lot of essays in economics, which is a subject in my school, and when I am learning outside, I need to practice writing.

句子结构混乱，缺少连词和动词形式错误。应使用连词连接句子，并且动词应使用现在进行时态。

× My school and when I learning outside need to practice writing.

✓ My school and when I am learning outside, I need to practice writing.

动词'learning'缺少助动词'am'，应使用现在进行时态。

× I like writing diary for daily life because when I was writing diary I can. Told my book what I meet day and my feeling is it just like a tree host? It can, it will not told anyone.

✓ I like writing a diary about daily life because when I write a diary, I can tell my book what I meet each day and my feelings. It is just like a tree host; it will not tell anyone.

句子结构不完整，时态混乱，动词形式错误。应使用一般现在时，补全句子结构。

× when I was writing diary I can. Told my book what I meet day and my feeling

✓ when I write a diary, I can tell my book what I meet each day and my feelings

时态使用不当，'was writing'应改为一般现在时'write'，'can told'应为'can tell'。

× my feeling is it just like a tree host? It can, it will not told anyone.

✓ my feelings are just like a tree host; it will not tell anyone.

代词使用错误，'it'指代不明且动词形式错误，应使用复数'feelings'和正确动词形式。

× Justify the diary. I have different feelings and different parents for every day, so the things must be changed.

✓ Regarding the diary, I have different feelings and different perspectives every day, so things must change.

句子结构混乱，词汇使用错误，'justify'用错，'parents'应为'perspectives'。

× different parents for every day

✓ different perspectives every day

词汇使用错误，'parents'应为'perspectives'，表示观点。

× so the things must be changed.

✓ so things must change.

被动语态使用不当，'must be changed'应改为主动语态'must change'。

× And when I grow up I have different attitude to the same things are same effects, so the things must be changed.

✓ And when I grow up, I have a different attitude to the same things and the same effects, so things must change.

时态和冠词使用错误，'attitude'前应加不定冠词'a'，句子结构需调整。

× I like handwriting because I can use different color of pants to write the same articles.

✓ I like handwriting because I can use different colors of pens to write the same articles.

量词使用错误，'color'应为复数'colors'，'pants'应为'pens'。

× When I was young, I like handwriting because I can use different color of pants to write the same articles.

✓ When I was young, I liked handwriting because I could use different colors of pens to write the same articles.

时态不一致，描述过去应使用过去时态。

× But I when I grow up I like used to typing because it's very convenient.

✓ But when I grow up, I like to use typing because it's very convenient.

动词形式错误，'used to typing'应改为'like to use typing'或'started to use typing'。

× But I when I grow up I like used to typing because it's very convenient.

✓ But when I grow up, I like typing because it's very convenient.

句子结构不完整，去掉多余词汇，保持句子通顺。

× You do not bring a lot of pens or pencils, you just use the laptop and it can change different colors in the same application.

✓ You do not need to bring a lot of pens or pencils; you just use the laptop, and it can change colors in the same application.

代词使用不当，缺少必要的助动词，句子连接不当。