Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and direct. For example, say 'I write a lot whenever I get the chance, especially notes. Although many people use their phones to take notes nowadays, I prefer writing on paper because I love it.' This will make your answer clearer and more effective.

例: I write a lot whenever I get the chance, especially notes. Although many people use their phones to take notes nowadays, I prefer writing on paper because I love it.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clear structure. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. For example, say 'I like to write many things, especially my dreams and class notes. Sometimes, I also make shopping lists or write down daily rules. For instance, I keep a chart of special locations I have visited.' This will make your answer more coherent and specific.

例: I like to write many things, especially my dreams and class notes. Sometimes, I also make shopping lists or write down daily rules. For instance, I keep a chart of special locations I have visited.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and directly. For example, say 'I don't think the things I write will change because I have been keeping journals since childhood and continue to do so. Writing is a joyful activity for me.' This will improve clarity and coherence.

例: I don't think the things I write will change because I have been keeping journals since childhood and continue to do so. Writing is a joyful activity for me.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by clearer sentence structure and linking words. For example, say 'I honestly prefer handwriting over typing because I am not very good at typing. Also, I have kept a journal since childhood, so writing by hand is convenient and enjoyable for me.' This will make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I honestly prefer handwriting over typing because I am not very good at typing. Also, I have kept a journal since childhood, so writing by hand is convenient and enjoyable for me.

× Is highlighted lot whenever I get chance to make a note.

✓ I highlight a lot whenever I get a chance to make a note.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Is highlighted lot' which is not a proper verb form here. The correct form is 'I highlight a lot' to express the habitual action. Also, 'a chance' needs the article 'a' before it.

× I took a note for everything.

✓ I take notes for everything.

The phrase 'a note' is singular but the meaning implies multiple notes, so 'notes' plural is appropriate. Also, 'took' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'take' is better.

× But I still prefer the ticket on my paper on notebook because I love writing.

✓ But I still prefer the ticket on my paper notebook because I love writing.

The phrase 'on my paper on notebook' is incorrect. It should be 'on my paper notebook' without the second 'on'. Also, 'ticket' seems out of context; possibly 'take notes' was intended but kept as 'ticket' as per instruction to only correct grammar.

× I like to write everything, especially those things of my dreams, then class notes, then suddenly made a list of shopping or list of Doo Doo rules in my daily life.

✓ I like to write everything, especially things about my dreams, then class notes, then suddenly make a list of shopping or a list of Doo Doo rules in my daily life.

'Those things of my dreams' is awkward; 'things about my dreams' is better. 'Suddenly made' is past tense but context suggests present habitual action, so 'suddenly make' is correct. Also, 'a list of shopping' needs the article 'a' before 'list'.

× For example, I keep a chart that I wrote it down in previously of my special locations.

✓ For example, I keep a chart that I wrote down previously of my special locations.

The phrase 'I wrote it down in' is incorrect; 'I wrote down' is sufficient. The word 'previously' should come before the phrase it modifies. The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here.

× I don't think those things I write down would change because in my childhood I keep tracking of my journals now and there's I end and I'm keep doing the things from my childhood.

✓ I don't think the things I write down will change because since my childhood I have been keeping track of my journals and I continue doing the things from my childhood.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Keep tracking' should be 'have been keeping track' to indicate continuous action from past to present. 'There's I end' is unclear and corrected to 'and I continue'. 'I'm keep doing' is incorrect; 'I continue doing' is correct.

× So I think it's a joyous occasion for me to write down something I love.

✓ So I think it's a joyous occasion for me to write down something I love.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context, so no correction is needed.

× I honestly prefer writing over typing because I am not good at typing very much.

✓ I honestly prefer writing over typing because I am not very good at typing.

The phrase 'not good at typing very much' is awkward. 'Not very good at typing' is the correct and natural expression.

× But in writing I keep a journal from my childhood so I love to write down things here and there and it pretty convenient for me because I am very good at it.

✓ But I have kept a journal since my childhood, so I love to write down things here and there and it is pretty convenient for me because I am very good at it.

'I keep a journal from my childhood' is incorrect; 'I have kept a journal since my childhood' correctly expresses continuous action from past to present. Also, 'it pretty convenient' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.