Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“have write”、“function novels”、“plan to public”等。建议加强语法基础，注意时态和动词形式的正确使用，同时使句子更简洁自然。

例: Yes, I enjoy writing a lot. About five years ago, I wrote a science fiction novel, and I plan to publish it this year. Writing helps me relax after work.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“I I”、“science function novels”、“I'll I like”等。建议练习连贯表达，避免重复，并使用正确的词汇和句型。

例: I prefer writing science fiction novels because I am interested in biology. I have a vivid imagination about biological concepts, so I decided to write a novel based on them.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，句子不完整且不连贯。建议多练习句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意发音和语法的准确性。

例: I believe my writing will change over time because as I read more books and travel more, I will gain new ideas and perspectives to improve my stories.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“a typing”、“becauses”、“correct correct”，句子结构不够清晰。建议注意冠词使用，避免重复，使用连贯的句子表达观点。

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because typing is more efficient. It allows me to easily correct mistakes without leaving marks on the paper, making my writing clearer and neater.

× I even have write a function novels about five years ago and I plan to public it's not this year.

✓ I even wrote a science fiction novel about five years ago and I plan to publish it this year.

这里的时间状语是“about five years ago”，表示过去的时间，动词应该用过去式。原句中“have write”是错误的，正确的过去式是“wrote”。另外，“function novels”应为“science fiction novels”，且“public it's not this year”应为“publish it this year”。

× I even have write a function novels about five years ago and I plan to public it's not this year.

✓ I even wrote a science fiction novel about five years ago and I plan to publish it this year.

“a function novels”中“a”是单数冠词，后面跟复数名词“novels”不匹配，应改为单数“novel”。

× I plan to public it's not this year.

✓ I plan to publish it this year.

“it's”是“it is”的缩写，语义不符，应使用宾格代词“it”作为动词“publish”的宾语。

× Because writing give me a really relax before after my work.

✓ Because writing gives me a really relaxing feeling before and after my work.

“give”应为第三人称单数形式“gives”；“relax”是动词，需用形容词“relaxing”或名词“relaxation”；“before after”应为“before and after”，表示“在……之前和之后”。

× Because writing give me a really relax before after my work.

✓ Because writing gives me a really relaxing feeling before and after my work.

主语“writing”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，故“give”应改为“gives”。

× I I prefer writing science function novels because I'll I like the knowledge of biology.

✓ I prefer writing science fiction novels because I like the knowledge of biology.

“I'll I like”是重复且错误的表达，应删去多余部分。

× I I prefer writing science function novels because I'll I like the knowledge of biology.

✓ I prefer writing science fiction novels because I like the knowledge of biology.

“function”应为“fiction”，表示“科幻小说”。

× I always have plenty of imagination about the biology, so I decided to write a novel about it.

✓ I always have plenty of imagination about biology, so I decided to write a novel about it.

“the biology”中“biology”作为学科名词通常不加冠词“the”。

× I believe the things I write would change over time because as I as I read more than more bulky and experiencing more than more traveling, I would get more.

✓ I believe the things I write would change over time because as I read more books and experience more traveling, I would get more ideas.

“more than more bulky”应为“more books”，“bulky”用错词；“experiencing more than more traveling”应为“experience more traveling”；“more”后应有名词“ideas”。

× I believe the things I write would change over time because as I as I read more than more bulky and experiencing more than more traveling, I would get more. Idea about how to write? Our story. So.

✓ I believe the things I write would change over time because as I read more books and experience more traveling, I would get more ideas about how to write our story.

句子结构混乱，断句错误，应合并为完整句子，去除多余的问号和断句。

× Oh, I like a typing more than writing an becauses I think typing is more efficiently and can correct correct it easily without any. Any marks on the paper?

✓ Oh, I like typing more than handwriting because I think typing is more efficient and I can correct it easily without any marks on the paper.

“a typing”错误，typing是不可数名词，不用冠词；“writing an”应为“handwriting”；“efficiently”应为形容词“efficient”；“correct correct it”重复，应删去一个。

× Oh, I like a typing more than writing an becauses I think typing is more efficiently and can correct correct it easily without any. Any marks on the paper?

✓ Oh, I like typing more than handwriting because I think typing is more efficient and I can correct it easily without any marks on the paper.

“becauses”拼写错误，应为“because”；句中断句不当，应合并为完整句子。

× So it's very convenient and directly to write a clear sentence.

✓ So it's very convenient and direct to write a clear sentence.

“directly”是副词，修饰动词，句中应使用形容词“direct”修饰“convenient”，且“to write a clear sentence”是动词不定式短语，不能用副词修饰。