Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，表达重复且结构混乱。建议简化句子，避免重复，明确表达观点。

例: I don't write a lot these days because I usually type on my phone, which is more convenient. However, when I want to express my emotions, I prefer writing on paper.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达不清晰，且有语法错误。建议明确说明写作内容并用连词连接句子。

例: I like to write reminders to help me remember important things. Besides that, I also write about my personal feelings and important events in my life.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，内容不连贯。建议用简单句表达观点，并用连接词使内容连贯。

例: Yes, my writing has changed. When I read what I wrote in middle and high school, I feel embarrassed because it was immature. Now, I prefer to write about more important topics.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子结构不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达偏好并使用连接词。

例: It depends. For daily tasks, I prefer typing on my phone because it's convenient. However, when I want to express my personal feelings, I choose handwriting because it helps me remember better.

× To be honest, not really because you now in recent years are preferred type on my phone and I think that that would be convenient, but I I want to write about something about my emotions.

✓ To be honest, not really because in recent years I prefer typing on my phone and I think that is convenient, but I want to write about something about my emotions.

句子中时态和主语使用不当，'you now in recent years are preferred type'结构混乱，应改为'I prefer typing'，保持现在时态和主语一致。

× I prefer to write the reminders to the Cape May remembering something important, but I also write something personal like my emotions and what is important to my life.

✓ I prefer to write reminders to help me remember something important, but I also write something personal like my emotions and what is important in my life.

介词使用错误，'reminders to the Cape May remembering'不通顺，应改为'remind me'，表达更准确。

× Definitely when I record the things I write in my middle school or is a high school, I felt embarrassed because that is, you know, very, very Navy and sometimes it feels very funny.

✓ Definitely, when I recorded the things I wrote in middle school or high school, I felt embarrassed because they were, you know, very, very naive and sometimes it felt very funny.

时态错误，描述过去的事情应使用过去时，'record'和'write'应改为'recorded'和'wrote'，'is a high school'应改为'high school'，'Navy'应为'naive'拼写错误。

× But now I prefer look something more important.

✓ But now I prefer to look at something more important.

动词后缺少介词，'prefer look'应为'prefer to look at'，使表达完整。

× I well, it depends on if you know in the daily lives I prefer to type something on my phone.

✓ Well, it depends. In daily life, I prefer to type something on my phone.

介词和表达不自然，'depends on if you know in the daily lives'应简化为'depends'，'in the daily lives'应为'in daily life'。

× You know that definitely convenience and if sometime I prefer to record my personal feelings or emotions, I will chose to write on the paper by my hands.

✓ You know, that is definitely convenient, and if sometimes I prefer to record my personal feelings or emotions, I will choose to write on paper by hand.

量词和词形错误，'convenience'应为形容词'convenient'，'sometime'应为副词'sometimes'，'chose'应为动词原形'choose'，'by my hands'应为'by hand'。

× I think that will makes me to remain.

✓ I think that will help me to remember.

主谓一致错误，'will makes'应为'will make'，且表达不准确，'remain'应改为'memorize'或'remember'。